fairytale. - Comments

This is stunning. I love the way you had everything paused out. I really enjoyed reading each and every stanza; I was so happy that it ended up being a happy ending. It's quite a beautiful poem in a lot of ways and I don't think words can express that. :)

wow. very good.

Very, very, very good. Very well written and I love the form you wrote it in. =D

Amazing, truly. I love the way the first line in each stanza is just one word with the following semi-colon, because it really sets a unique flow with each pause. Also, the progression from lost and falling to something more emotional with the crying and shouting, and then the sudden smiling, just gives it all a very cool feel to it.
You did a wonderful job! :)

oh I felt so upset when I began to read, this story kept tightening it's grip on me ):

and then the last verse was just wow. I still think s/he's dead. and maybe this is some sort of afterlife.

In anycase, this is brilliant.

This is simply breath taking :)

This is really great! I like the form you used, very cool :)

This is kind of amazing. :D
That's my failed attempt at a compliment. XD Sorry.
But it's good. The ending is... :D

The form is different, in an amazing sort of way.^^
I believe this has become one of my favorites.

I love how it goes from hope to despair to a happy ending. I have to admit, I was holding my breath near the end to see where it would go.

I really do love this.
The way you worded each line made me really visualize someone falling and grasping and shouting, very clear imagery. Takes a bit to actually imagine things just from a short poem, but you did a very good job making it possible. =]
I commend you, wonderful poem, as everyone else has said.

[Thank you, by the way, for your comment on my own writing. Much appreciated.] =]

Wow. This is amazing...
It's very straight forward and raw.
I am at a lost of words..

Ah, Rachel, you really are a jack of all trades, pun somewhat intended. I really love the style, the repetitive pattern of each stanza is marvelous. The lack of punctuation only adds to the style and emotion of the poem, and the influence you have over words is simply astounding. What can I say? You're brilliant, love.

This poem is really great. It's not so much full of angsty emotion like the usual deep poems, but it is definitely memorable. The way you use each word at the beginning of each stanza is amazing and adds to the overall poem very well. I enjoyed reading it. (:

I really enjoyed how the lack of punctuation wasn't distracting, which is something that infuriates me to the end of my rope and then threatens to pry off my fingers one by one until I fall...I'm really big on grammar, okay?

That was amazing! I really loved the idea of it and I loved how you started out each paragraph with a word that said what was happening. Awesome!

Oh, very good! :) Very good, indeed

[i] This is, so [b] amazing! :D [/b]
It is beautiful Rachel, be proud. Very proud. [/i]

good poem, very unique structure,

I love this.
It flows together nicely.
Good work. :]