It’s a different style, which I like. Also liked the rhyme scheme and the way the first line had one word and the second three. The first stanza having forms of ‘feel’ repeated so close together doesn’t flow very well to me. Heads up on “individual” and “contrasted” in the second stanza. And the last line of the second stanza is a bit off for flow. Overall, it’s something that might be short but is interesting despite its length.
May 2nd, 2009 at 08:12am