wow... thats awesome! its like... i have no idea whats actually going on, but its damn good. why can you write so amazingly well?? i can barely write anything before i get lost of ideas...
I like this story much better than the other one. It's got more depth and maturity. Though I still think you need to delve into your images more, make them really stand out in their originality.
Oh wow. I- I seriously don't know what to say about this except Its just beautiful. No other words can describe it. I absolutely love the description, the mysterious setting, I just love every word of it. *two thumbs up!*