Remember what you said to me about girls naming their characters weird ass names? Yeah. You've changed from past to present a couple times in your narrative. "Everyone is into Sam Winchester." You bet your ass! You changed stuff around a bit. It has a better flow. It liked how it ended on a simple note.
Xterra, jacket, comics. Awww yeah! Who dis be staring a Vye? Hmm. Coalzie sounds like a cosmetologist. Johnny! That is soooo cute! Maglocksham! haha asdfghjkl! asdfghjkl! asdfghjkl!
I loved how Coalzie said that it was better than watching the Super Bowl. Hahahaha Perfect ending. Man, I want to watch that movie. It's waiting for me in a wonderful file on my computer, but I still have yet to watch it. Maybe this was the encouragment I needed to watch it. Thanks. Hahaha
I'm a little disappointed in you. It's short. I've read it. I'm not in it. You're with Zacky! What the ef is going to happen with Matt and I (hopefully we break up). Me and Jimmy? Write more. Slave over this for me!
1) I can't believe you updated. Holy Shit - to quote a Eurighner sister. 2) Why would I want to be with nasty Brian even though we had a moment at the concert... Whatever. 3) Why are you with my future boyfriend? That is just wrong. *shaked head* 4) Are you going to update the one you typed up for creative writing? I want to know why Zacky got all pissed at me for talking to him. 5) GRRRRRRRRRRR! *shows fangs*
You've changed from past to present a couple times in your narrative.
"Everyone is into Sam Winchester." You bet your ass!
You changed stuff around a bit. It has a better flow.
It liked how it ended on a simple note.