Ellis Savory - Comments

thanks but i really kind of gave up on it...altho i do have more wriiten at home, i just dont feel like postin...maybe more comments would help?
lol

u should continue this one
I think it;s the best of your stories

I decided to addetails to my last comment
Spelling: maid is the person as made is when you make something
Puntuation: you have a lot of places that could use commas
Grammar: tooken instead of taken is really bad grammer

this is my favorite of your stories though

I like it
post the other 2 chapters
you do have some mistakes
spelling, grammar and punctiation