seven: Well i found something, but it's nothing major...
“Do you know her?” I asked, she shook her head no.
“Yeah, I went to university with her,” Electra said calming down. “That was priceless.” you wrote out that Electra didn't know her and yet in the next sentence you have her say that she does. May want to fix something in there. Other than that; loving this more and more. Can't wait to read the next chapter and I hope angie is out of the story for good; if not then she's the character i'm hating.
six: Had some extremely cute scenes and descriptions. Uh oh; whose the blonde? Wondering what's zacky excuse for her is going to be? Whose she dating? Lots of questions that i can answer if i read the next chapter, so bye.
four: So what's going to happen next? Favorite part would have to be the last bit and can't really hate a character just yet. What's going to happen now? Can't wait.
two: Keeping adding more chapters to this, unless of course it's about to end. Great descriptions of the party and everything else. Will zacky remember her or not really? Wondering what else is going to happen next? Can't wait to read and find out.
Not sure if i commented to this or not; so whatever. Great descriptions and liking this too. Wondering what's going to happen next? What do you mean two stories about the same person?