Alfred's New and Improved Love Song - Comments

Well, that certainly put a smile on my face.
There's probably no point in me giving any sort of full-blown review for this, since our writing skills are clearly incomparable. But nevertheless, I just thought you should know how much I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Insanely clever. The depiction of Alfred's wife as a beached whale was simply perfect - an aptly grotesque and warted creature, yet with a gentle quality that shone through at the end as Alfred's true love was revealed.
And the Elliot reference [as someone mentioned above] was a nice touch. Middle-aged frustrations. :]
Eck. If I'm completely off in my interpretations, I apologise.

Oh, and can I ask why you chose not to use quotation marks for dialogue? Not that it detracted from the piece in any way, I'm just genuinely curious. :]

Hmm, I actually thought it was good.
No, good is an understatement, but I cannot describe. My mom is making me go to bed now (oh yes, that sounds dumb, doesn't it). Well, I guess I cannot really describe it now, how marvelous it was and a that shabang.

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♥Whisper 'Are You Dying'♥
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The Way:

I'm making the assumption this was in reference to T.S. Eliot's 'The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock.' Hehe.

It was very nice and very refreshing to see you writing romance. I never thought it possible. Haha. This character seems to be more relateable to the readers, compared to your other stories. Go Jolly.

It's more a revision of "Prufrock," but yes, it parallels it quite a bit. Mostly it's just a cute little story, haha. I put in the Prufrock element to keep myself entertained.

I'm making the assumption this was in reference to T.S. Eliot's 'The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock.' Hehe.

It was very nice and very refreshing to see you writing romance. I never thought it possible. Haha. This character seems to be more relateable to the readers, compared to your other stories. Go Jolly.

Wow...I really enjoyed that. I love the way you write...and I don't even know you?
But awesome anyway. (=

*Lonna

I love the way you write, your descriptions are marvelous;
…stray cat drinking water from a puddle across the street.
I love it.

Oh god that was great.

The last line made me smile.