Cut Above All the Rest - Comments

I hope this review is okay. I’m generally not fantastic at reviewing chaptered stories, and it’s only a few chapters so far...but not to get ahead of myself. OH, and this is for the first two chapters. I copied them into Word so I could work on the review when I wasn’t online and distracted, but it took me a while to do it. >> Sorry about that. But I’ll review the third chapter soonish too.

Cadlyn and Jon’s relationship is nice. I think the fact that he saved her life adds another element to it. (That bit was done really well. It seemed like one of those chance catastrophes that can happen everyday.) And I like that they care about each other, and depend on each other in a way but they’re not overly clingy. It’s like an average friendship, but with a little something extra going on, ‘cause of their feelings for each other. The way Cadlyn said goodbye definitely makes me think that she definitely likes him more than a friend. It seemed very subtle, but I got the impression that she was saying more in just a few words. And Jon definitely likes/loves her too; he seems really smitten. And they talked for ages, that’s so sweet.

And I think Cadlyn’s a cool character. I think of her as strong. Independent maybe. The conversations and the banter-type stuff between the two of them are really sweet, and believable. I love the bit about superman. And she has a cool name too; it’s unique and I don’t think I’ve ever heard it before, but it doesn’t sound too unbelievably out there. It’s almost like a twist on the name Caitlin.

This review is really all over the place, so I’m going to backtrack a bit. The part about cold hot-cakes amused me for some reason; seemed like a contradiction and was kinda ironic. That bit reinforced the strength of Jon and Cadlyn’s relationship too, because he’s choosing to stay back and talk to her, rather than head out with the guys. It relates to this part: She was part of another life of his, if that made sense. It’s nice, because even though Panic have gotten more well known as a band, he’s kept a part of his previous life. And the fact that he makes sure to stay in contact with Cadlyn and so frequently (as shown by his inbox) is sweet. The Cadlyn<3 thing is nice too; it adds a personal touch.

I’m interested to see how this story pans out.
Oh yeah, and along with Emily, I got the impression that Cadlyn is a brunette.
idk why. It just seems to fit.

i really like this :]

update again soon!

I've never really read a Jon Walker story before... I really love this, though.
Caddy's so awesome and he relationship between her and Jon is so strange but still realistic too.

I'm really, really liking your story! It's as amazing as Jon Walker. Update as soon as you can, please!

This story sounds really good ! Update, plllease ? :D

You've done it again, Chrissie. I'm a sucker for your stories which are my cherry lollipops that I enjoy very much. haha x)
I usually never read Jon Walker fanfics, but lately I've been expanding my sphere and getting into Brendon Urie and PATD fics. This one exceeds everything ;)
I love it, the writing is impeccable.
big time kudos to you<3

:cheese:
This is a great story.
like the grammer and spacing is fantastic, and I can actually read it :tehe:

I think you should update this again :tehe:

It's really good (;
I love that paer about the science friend and how they could never be apart it's cute (:
good job!!

This is great, I like that they are just friends, different from the usual :girl at home I wana fuck: and all that jazz.
But yeah awesome story.

^ Thank you, guys

...Yeah, well.
After Emily's comment mine'll look like shit,
but this is really good.
:tehe:

Oh dear Chrissie. :tehe:
This will be short but for some reason I smiled hard at this. :XD

Cadlyn... interesting. :think:
I generally get character's looks from their appearance and don't even register descriptions given in text - for instance, "her name was Jane and she had blonde hair and brown eyes" when in my head she's ranga and has blue eyes - but I can't quite pick this one. It's like Caitlin kinda, which implies brown hair normally, but I'm not sure. :think:

It's also interesting because it's not... normal, but it's not abnormal. Like when you first read it it's a different name but it's not like they named her... Mesopatamia or something. It's not bizarre, it's just uncommon. And I think I like that; it gives her some sort of... character, but it's not weird.

And Cad makes me think of Kad. :tehe:

Anyway, onto the writing.
The paragraphs about her name/hanging up and about him looking at his Sidekick were a little bit choppy I thought, but as for the rest of it, I lovedlovedloved - I have a thing for Panic fics at the moment. And although the chapter was a little bit short and I probs wouldn't have minded a bit more, there was a story there - I can't see what it is yet but I know it's there because there's a friend relationship and no bullshit "omg my girlfriend is at home -crycrycry-" which I don't feel like reading tonight and I can just see this story going somewhere. :XD

cold hot-cakes
:lmfao That made me laugh. :con: 'Cause like... cold and hot and yeah. :tehe:
:hand: ur meant 2 b aussie.

Cadlyn<3:
More time in bed, Babydoll.
Oh dear, he's got himself in quite a pickle now hasn't he? :tehe:
I love how you built it up like that, how it was such a natural progression from "best friend" to "person my bandmates think I'm fucking"... it just sort of flowed perfectly and worked.

Plus the loveheart is just too cute. :tehe:
I want a friend who lovehearts my name in their phone.
:finger: Go do it in yours nao.

I'm sorry this comment is so shit.
But I like teh story a lot. :cute:
And I'm going to subscribe. :con:
EDIT: :/ I use :tehe: too much. :tehe: