Lemonade - Comments

I love this! It was really sad in parts. ...despite the particularly grotesque bruises blotching her arms so that she couldn't wear her favorite sun dress anymore. For some reason I find that part the saddest, not even her killing him was sadder than that.
It was kinda weird, the way it says she loves him but then she kills him. I don't know, I just don't understand how someone who loves someone would then kill them. But that's just me.
I love the lemonade part too, for some reason. :L

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Wow wow wow! This was amazing, and made me laugh. The fact of the whole lemonade thing made it humorous, yet the talk of him hurting her and her killing him was a stark contrast that made it an awesome peice of work. I really loved it especially the way you described his heart beats stopping, and the end sentance where she finally exhaled. I would write more, but I can't think of anything except this is an awesome one-shot!

Nice. :mrgreen: I'm glad she did something,
although maybe, Maybe a bit extreme but still, yay. :mrgreen: