Driving Nowhere - Comments

Right. Proper feedback. My keyboard still isn't fixed but I have another keyboard plugged into my laptop :tehe:

I love the opening, its like wondering what has happened and it makes you want to read on.

The description throughout the whole thing is absolutely incredible. Like, I can picture everything in my mind so well! I love it when writers do that, it really puts you into the story.

And slowly it all pieces together and the story comes together.

Like how she wanted to be famous but now everything has changed. Poor little China Doll. Wow. That description is incredible, how do you manage to come up with things like that? It was stunning.

It's sad how everything has changed now and their marriage is failing. It's incredibly sad and a very moving oneshot. Well done. :arms:

Your writing is amazing. I will leave you better feedback when my laptop is fixed (I'm having to press ctrl+v every time I want to type an s becaue the button is broken). But I just want you to know now that your writing is amazing. :arms:

This comment will be developed later :tehe: When I has epic loads of time to write comment on epic story.

Butyeah, I loved it Seriously. You need to know how epic your writing is because it's pure gold. Everything from the vocabulary to the way the entire thing flowed and was relevant to all audiences (I sound like a cheesy film director) Butyeah. It was awesome, Becky. :arms:

And I was entirely satisfied ~~

Ily :arms:

I'm sorry
But it took forever to write what I wrote :tehe:
And when I say forever, I mean about a month.
I was basically stuck with it :file: And I began to resent it. I just wanted it done!

But I'm glad you liked it :cute:
Even if you weren't entirely satisfied.

And the song is wicked. Might not be to your taste... but it's one of my favourite Hadouken! songs. It's beautiful in my opinion.

When I finished the story I kept clicking on the down arrow of the stroll bar.
:cheese:
I loved it. I loved the failed marriage, the fairy-tale name-drop/motive, the language, but not the lenght.
Much, much too short.
Not that my comment is any better.

I'm so curious about the song now.

Random songfic.
Failed marriage between a man and a woman.

Lyrics in summary by Hadouken!
Enjoy. :cute: