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  • Vacant Eyes

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    sweetheart a liitle suicidal huh?!?!

    love ya anyway
    The Sameh
    December 18th, 2008 at 01:48am
  • Drayden

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    Wow, this was very powerful. I liked the emotion behind it.

    One thing, though, you start off with 'I drug my body home, yearning for my daily dose of blood.' It should be 'I dragged...' And you've got a few minor mistakes with spelling and capitalization. Just thought I'd point that out.

    But it really was amazing.

    Love you,
    Drayden
    December 18th, 2008 at 12:12am
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