Another Mobius of Names - Comments

I think I've just become obsessed with your writing. You have the wonderful talent of seizing someones attention then holding it until the writing is done. It's damn spiffy.

Stopwatch is actually sort of in the middle.

But yeah, I like this style of yours more. Your stuff are downright quotable now.

The Way:

You are on a roll, aren't you?

I love the first paragraph. You're becoming more... relateable, at least your characters are. There's just something so distant about those in Dousing the Phoenix and Stopwatch. But in this one, there's like a truth in everything you said.

I do admire your writing, I really do.

I'm revising Phoenix to get rid of that element a little more.

Hmm, a little more surprising that you feel that way about Stopwatch, but I can see what you mean.

You are on a roll, aren't you?

I love the first paragraph. You're becoming more... relateable, at least your characters are. There's just something so distant about those in Dousing the Phoenix and Stopwatch. But in this one, there's like a truth in everything you said.

I do admire your writing, I really do.

Oh. My. Gawd.

This is my favorite that you've ever posted on here. O_O

The rawness...honesty. It was perfect. It is perfect. This is a window into you. Maybe it doesn't have a latch to open it up, or hinges to lift it, but we can see through it. And it's the image of imperfection.

I don't care how wordy you think it is. It sounds like you couldn't get anything out fast enough. I think you did a fine job.