Secrets Sleep in Winter Clothes - Comments

You walked on the edge of a cliff and there were always gusts of wind blowing at your back, hands pulling at the hems of your pants, trying to make you fall into something you weren't but something they wanted you to want to be. - I really liked this line. The imagery it brought was pretty cool.

Hm, wow. It wasn't the ending I was expecting. I was expecting something more... concluded, maybe. But I still enjoyed it nonetheless. And I don't think there was anything monotonous here. Very good, amazing work. :)

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Real words fail me.
This is...stunning.

This is beautiful, and I love love love your imagery! (I also love NMH, we must be musical twins!)

Wow, you love me? :shock: Awesome, lol.

Alright may I firstly say twas genius, there now I shall continue to pick it apart.
Description is good, no, wonderful, but you have a lot of it at the beginning. When you start something, anything, you need to grab your reader. Just make sure that its not too long to start.

As you said yourself it is quite long but that is not truly a bad thing. heh heh actually I was thinking of telling you to add more about who Emily had been. (For instance when describing the key in her pocket instead of saying 'she/I remembered' You may want to actually show a memory of Emily talking about her keys; how and why she loved them etc. Basically though, just to add more memories of Emily herself would be nice.

Though I feel I must say my dear that it was brilliant.

Oh and if my spelling and grammer are atrocious please remember that I'm writing this at 2:33 AM and I'm extremely tired. :roll:

um.... don't mind this! I just really wanted to use these!!! 8) :oops: