The World Has Its Shine, but I Would Drop It on a Dime - Comments

  • LakeEffectKid

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    This is the best Gabilliam I have ever read. Descriptive, but you don't waste time on the unneeded things.

    My favorite part was the Gabe fell to his knees before the other boy. “Please forgive me. I’ll do anything to make it up to you.”

    “Oh, alright, I forgive you,” William caved. It’s hard not to when the most gorgeous man ever created is on his knees begging for forgiveness and promising
    anything. part. tehe
    December 12th, 2009 at 11:55am
  • merance

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    Hey, thanks for entering shine like millions. and I's contest! Your story was a joy to read, and I don't normally read William/Gabe stories, and it pleasantly surprised me at how good it was.

    I loved how you ruined the shirt, by the way! The fire was very original and had me cracking up laughing. :D
    It was also a nice plotline, with the mystery of having to hide their relationship and the sadness of only being able to see each other while on tour.

    I only had one problem with your grammar that I can think of - you said "cumming" twice (which isn't actually a word) and it should have been "came". But otherwise, it was a very well thought out story and I enjoyed it every much. Well done.

    :D
    January 4th, 2009 at 02:10am
  • TalkingIsMyLife

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    Erincer Walker:
    Wow! When I read the summary, I was like, "Beckett/Saporta. Joy of joys." Then, I read it and was flat out amazed and I absolutely loved it. I find it a little funny because William almost sounds like a whiny bitch. It was abosultely adorable and sexy... adorxy. Hahaha.

    Good job.
    I agree whole-heartedly, so Erincer Walker took the words from my mouth.
    Oh, and Gabe lighting eggs on fire? That would so happen. Amazing job!
    December 29th, 2008 at 07:45am
  • Victoria Flannel

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    Nnngh! Upon seeing this story was a William/Gabe story, I had to read it, and, well, I do not regret it.

    It was great, really. ^^
    December 28th, 2008 at 11:06am
  • Ermin.

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    Wow! When I read the summary, I was like, "Beckett/Saporta. Joy of joys." Then, I read it and was flat out amazed and I absolutely loved it. I find it a little funny because William almost sounds like a whiny bitch. It was abosultely adorable and sexy... adorxy. Hahaha.

    Good job.
    December 25th, 2008 at 05:15am
  • Trash Hologram.

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    Yummay :D
    Comment ownage.
    I love how its just like BUTTSECKSBUTTSECKS and straight to the point lol.
    you is amazing anna.
    December 24th, 2008 at 07:41pm