Bodies - Rewrite - Comments

Hm.
I love the title, and that's almost all I can give you.
This has potential, but you have a lot of punctuation mistakes. I suggest getting a beta.
But, yeah, this could turn into something great. I like this idea.

Real good re-write :tehe:

Wow... serously good work here
I mean you were already an amazing writer but I can see some serious sort of... i don't know what the right word is... it's like your writing has matured even more. It's really captivating. Already your protagonist is well-rounded and interesting and you're setting up such an air of realism as well as suspense.
It's brilliant, I can't wait to read more!
Love
Mary
xxx

It's about time you get back to this story! I missed it.
You've done a great job re-writing it, too.
^_^

Wowwwiee!!
its brill duddee!
keep on writing!
or prepared to be bugged by me 24/7 =p
seriously I am v.impressed
=D