I really like it, you could make it where she tries to find out who it was so she knows who to stay away from, and when she does find out who it is she can't tell anyone because Adam told her not to.
May 13th, 2011 at 10:05pm
A Young Men's Camp for Juvenile Delinquents... and I'm a girl. - Comments
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PLEASEEE continue?!?!June 18th, 2010 at 06:28am
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Nice story. =)February 1st, 2010 at 08:16pm
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this story is awesome!
please continue?
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Oh, and Adam is a juvenile delinquent therefore is protected by law, 'cause he doesn't know any better. Psh, Yeah right! The whole camp is secured, you know, full out barbed wire and search lights. Besides, I'm bringing out the poetic liscence!January 25th, 2009 at 06:57am
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Damn "World of Facts' Book! It has failed me once again!- Ballroom Blitz?:
- "It hurts too much... just make it stop, please!" I wheezed. Then I remembered, hadn't Houdini died from a simple puch to the gut? Oh shit!"
No. He died because he had acute apendicitis and his temperature was 40 degrees when he went on stage. He went in this upside down trap, whilst chained up, and yes, he was punched earlier, as an experiment, but that just made it worse. It wasn't the punch that killed him, it was the fact that his appendix burst while he was inside the water trap and everyone just thought he was struggling to get out, not that he burst his appendix.
Lol, i did a project on him ;)
It had a section on strange deaths, Houdini's being one of them... Lies I tell you! That book is full of nothing but lies!January 25th, 2009 at 06:54am -
"It hurts too much... just make it stop, please!" I wheezed. Then I remembered, hadn't Houdini died from a simple puch to the gut? Oh shit!"
No. He died because he had acute apendicitis and his temperature was 40 degrees when he went on stage. He went in this upside down trap, whilst chained up, and yes, he was punched earlier, as an experiment, but that just made it worse. It wasn't the punch that killed him, it was the fact that his appendix burst while he was inside the water trap and everyone just thought he was struggling to get out, not that he burst his appendix.
Lol, i did a project on him ;)January 25th, 2009 at 03:40am -
"It hurts too much... just make it stop, please!" I wheezed. Then I remembered, hadn't Houdini died from a simple puch to the gut? Oh shit!"
No. He died because he had acute apendicitis and his temperature was 40 degrees when he went on stage. He went in this upside down trap, whilst chained up, and yes, he was punched earlier, as an experiment, but that just made it worse. It wasn't the punch that killed him, it was the fact that his appendix burst while he was inside the water trap and everyone just thought he was struggling to get out, not that he burst his appendix.
Lol, i did a project on him ;)January 25th, 2009 at 03:40am -
Lol.
I don't mean to be mean, but in your chapter
"Oh dear"
It has that Adam is "A" Rank Deliquent.. he killed someone, yes?
Well if he killed someone why would he not be in jail? And wouldn't his cabin be all... guarded? Lolol.January 25th, 2009 at 03:33am -
so yeah... I've just read all the chapters you've posted so far, and I've just got to say that I really like it!! :D keep it up!January 16th, 2009 at 04:39am
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hey... i like this too :). if you wanted a suggestion on where to go with it, what if people (eg her parents and camp director and anybody else in charge) thought she was responsible for her brother's death somehow?? Just an idea.. but it sounds really great!! Yay for girls being as good (or as bad) as boys!!! :DJanuary 5th, 2009 at 11:21am
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lol awesome beginning- and i like the idea of it too
*sits back and waits for update*
more soon?January 4th, 2009 at 10:27pm
