Yay! Sex! - Comments

Love this story you really need 2 add more
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because it FREAKEN AWESOME

she's cheating!? no good! I ike this tho. amazingly! I don't usually like the sexual stuff. XD

this... is... so... ohhotdamn.
1) ollie is a hot name
2) does ollie know that carrie is cheating?

im not sure who i like her better with. but ollie is.. just... so... hot.

I can't believe Carrie is cheating on Roxie! Not cool.

Wow. That was intense. You had me going. More please?

This is interesting.

same as last time....speechless as hell...

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*whisper* damn....

i love your story it is great. i hope you update soon.

Update soon!

I love it.
No errors.
Amazing.
DUDE.
It took you forever to update! D:

I love it, much better. I love this story. Absolutely love it.
No more critisism today, 'cus everything is pretty perfect. Keep it up, love.

Hey lorna! Glad you like it love. Thanks, will do, speak to you soon xox

Kitty babe, hurry up with the next chapter.
I love it :)
You are really good at writting and im already deeply inlove with the characters although you need to evolve the character profiles a little, describing their appearance and personality. But thats just an idea.
xxx ily hun :) Hurry up and come down soon xxxx.
Guess who? ;) xxxx

I wanted to show that they were thinking pretty much the same thing all the time, and were also thinking about what the other would like.

Wow..
I like it, but...
Why is it that their POV's are pretty much the same? I don't like that. Be creative, be original. I like it, just add more flavor to it.

This is good, but I don't really understand it because most of it just seems to be trains of thought. Like, who exactly are the two girls? I think more description is needed, but I like the idea.

Oh, yeah, I didn't get to finish it yesterday, but it will be redone, don't worry. xx kitty xx

I liked the first chapter, but the second is weird. It just say's "Carrie."