I loved this one! =] It was the first one I was ever in I think. Lol. =]
January 27th, 2009 at 12:04am
great story!!
for ease of reading, I'd recommend making sure that you separate quotes out, and make sure you have defined paragraphs :) i suck at explaining things, so if that doesn't make sense, take a look at my story she'll fall in love with you, the way I have the quotes separate from the bulk of the writing. that is how it is in most fiction books, so it is kind of a rule of thumb, you could say, when it comes to writing.
i look forward to reading more :) :)
