Sesshomaru's New Playmate - Comments

i love the story will you update soon?

love it, it is toootaly good!!!! cant wait for more!!!!

plez keep up the story i like it :)

Nagi's in a Nazi mood today, so she's gonna explain what needs to be fixed, because she wants too, and thinks that you can do better.

1. Sesshomaru is WAAAAYYY too OOC. He's stoic and cool, showing little or no emotion. And if he does, well, it's never a good thing. (Jaken begged Sesshomaru to hit him when he saw lord Fluffy smiling) He's EMOTIONLESS, not an ass. (I do understand a slight bit of OOC-ness being needed for a ROMANCE, but that's like, for mushy behavior. Not snaps and snarls.

2. There is a bitchen amount of spelling errors. Fix it. Too many errors, and people will stop reading it in the middle of a chapter. I almost did, but decided I would give the swift kick in the ass that I've always longed for =D Pop this thing inside Microsift word, spell check, re-read it yourself. If you don't have Word, there ARE online spell checkers.

3. It's in 2nd person, 'nough said (okay, I just have something against 2nd person, but whatever floats your boat)

4. Um, in theory, I like the idea. But the 3 things stated above (^) have made it not as enjoyable as it could be.

DUDE!!! what the hell is up with sesshomaru god damn it!!!!!! he would never act like that and i dont think he fouces at least 7 days of his time to have sex when he can do it with anyone!!!!!! why are u making him be so mean!!!!! yea he was already a mean character but not like this!!!! keep updating i want to see if inuyasha saves her or if sesshomaru falls for her!!!!

i really like this story! i hope u update soon!

Thanks ill start doing that after i put out the other chapters thats i already made.

Wow I like the idea of that.
I used to read goosebumps books like that.

I have a suggestion, could you put spaces inbetween your paragraphs just so readers won't be put off by the amount of writing.

But apart from that -really orginal idea. Yay purple hair.