It Brought Me To You - Comments

Stupid parents, writing a stupid will which says she can't go live with her grandparents...
I'm starting to really like Ryan. He's kinda... big brother-ish.

Hey!
Great chapter!
Poor Lucia.

I want to know what happens! Come on! Come on!
*Stares excitedly at the screen waiting for an update*

Loved it. Keep up the great work.

I was surprised because I thought that Lucia was having fun when she broke down in a flash! I wonder what will happen next... :D

Nice i loved the wheelchair scene

This is so good! I can't wait for more! (:

Nice continuation! Keep writing please!

HUN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I AM LOVING THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK DARLING!!!!!!!!!!!!

well I liked the story so far so u better keep writing, cuz Im very intrigued by it

Oh jesus, this last part scared me xD I won't her to give up!
Ryan sounds so sweet ^^

nice really nice loved the emotion

Great chapter. It was packed with emotion.
haha thanks for the story mention.
Lovely chapter length (sorry about mine ).

keep writing, I love it

Wow. I finally got ot read your story and I loved it.
*smiles* The sad stories always make me smile.
I think some of the descriptions you have used in this story are brilliant. You cover her emotions and reactions well. Other authors, and I'm sure that I have, on this site aren't able to cover the emotions one would be feeling but you have captured it well.

xXGreyWingsXx had some excellent points that could make this story that extra bit.

Good luck with the next chapters I am subscribed and waiting to see her encounter with her visitor. I'm pretty sure I will be an emotion packed confrontation when she discovers he is the one who crashed into her car.

=D

nice job for both of them.... get another one out

General Notes:
Lovely summary - gorgeous tension builder, really draws you in.
Er, maybe don't spoil the plot of Night at the Museum 2, for those of us who haven't seen it yet?
The 'holy shit, we're all gonna die' bit? Sounds too informal. Breaks the nice tension you were building up. Maybe alter it to something like... Mom screamed. I mean really screamed.
If all the others in the car had died, wouldn't it be more likely that she'd have some broken limbs? Or at least fractures.
Hospitals don't have en suites. If you want to use a mirror, then have her walk to a bedside table?
Try not to switch to the informal so much, it breaks the tension, which is delicious - for example, the bit at the end of Chapter 3, with her talking to herself, doesn't fit.

Spelling:
Prolouge - Prologue
Barley - barely
Lightening - Lightning

Grammar:
aside from - except

Otherwise, really nice concept, and I would love to see where you go from here! Just make sure you stick with the tension, and don't break it with informalities, because you've got something beautiful in places.

It's getting interesting, I wonder who is the visit *.* :D

I LAFF IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
SABBY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I LAFF YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It's weird that we're friends on here and on meebo. . .
EXCELLENT START TO AN INTERESTING STORY!!!!

OMG! I wonder what she will do when she finds out that the culprit about everything is the other survivor O.O

I'm not gonan read the next chapter lol! i dont like sad beginnings i'm sorry!