Bert's a Nice Guy. - Comments

Kthx, it's just the way the layout made it :/

just a little advice,
the summary is really hard to read, maybe space out the lines or something

Anyone want an update?

Lol i just realised it's been like 3 months O.O

Haha LOL Kelleh you are awsome. I too am in social studies :} Hi Sara!

I'll write more this week probably. But I might just be mean and make you all wait for the next chapter. Or maybe not since it took months for the last update...

I hate Murphys Law.

I'll be super excited when I have a second comments page ^ __________ ^ <-- happy like this!

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lol. Im in social studies cause my laptop fails at internet atm. Its awesomely awesome. This is the part where i rant and say write more but im not going to do that in order to make Murphys law work for me. Muhahahaha..... Try typing with mismatched gittens as Bronwyn calls them.

btw, SARA SAYS HI!!! im sitting right behind her being cool ^-^

YAY KELLEH!

Guitar.Passion.Twig.:

I'm clueless as to what you mean by "territory"?

Just means it comes with being a teenager really :}

It makes me smile when I read new comments ^ _______ ^ love you all

"obviously oblivious. rofl. try saying that aloud really fast heaps of times"
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i did, i ended up saying 'oblys-oblivs' yuss! i rock.

i doth like it danielle. ^^

Aw hell, we're teenagers. It comes with the fucking territory.

LOVE THAT QUOTE!!! XD
Like alice said, It is a very good ending line... but I'm clueless as to what you mean by "territory"?

Update soon pleaze

XD

obviously oblivious. rofl. try saying that aloud really fast heaps of times. tongue twister anyone? haha. this was good. and yeah i love the end line too lol

Thanks Alice :] I'll try

ILY! ^ ____________ ^

"Aw hell, we're teenagers. It comes with the fucking territory. "

That, is a good ending chapter line XD

Update again soon! xox

Kwlieness!!! Its awsum! so write more!!! XD

Thanks Basement :] I'll try to update real soon

Woot. Gosh darnit! Why do Mums interfere? It sucks! Good on Bert (hehe i love that name) for not listening to her. And AW, he called her babe. I can't wait for what his friends say... o.0 Update??

Thankieees Alice and Kelly! xx

Yeah, I like to edit a lot XD

It's weird, cuz I've read this... But it's not the same... You changed it and it's confuzzling lol. Good though! xox

=S I didn't know we had to do that

First things first, I immediately noticed you don't have gaps between your talking. You have to do it like this...

The hallways were dark and decrepit. No one ever came here, except the wrong doers. The ninja crept stealthily towards the corner,

"AHHH!" The boy bandit screamed "Where did you come from?"

"I'm ninja. I come from nowhere and everywhere...." The ninja replied mysteriously.

Ninja fades away and the bandit boy is left on his own in an empty corridor with only footprints to remind him of the ninja's odd arrival and departure.

Okay, it's a s*itty example but I'm thinking on the spot here... So yeah, do that and I'll check the rest later when I have more time.

xox

I'm annoyed cause I got a message saying it doesn't follow the guidlines. O.o I don't know exactly what's wrong.... tell me if you saw anything majorly wrong.

BTW Kelly, of course you've read it before! It's the first chapter O.o why would I have given you anything other than the first chapter to read first?? And why would I post anything other than the first chapter first??

Silly. :D

Anyways, help is appreciated :D

Fine then, I won't be mean. It's great except I think I've read this chapter before. So you must put more up. btw watch your w's they are not e's eg eas --> was. "And I am now down one scarf" lol I love it. Next chapter please =D