Them - Comments

;O I didn't notice this story until about an hour ago. XD; I like it, though. It's cool. =] I'll wait patiently for your next update~

... it didn't make them all caps!! It was all caps when I typed it up... owell.

Happy Birthday KAITLYN!!! :D

Awesome second chapter, Rin!! We got a bit of action, which is always good, lol.

I'M FINALLY 15!!! xD

xoxo
Kaitlyn!!!

Thank you! Your comment means a lot, and it helped! I was worried that mind reader and mind controller might have been too similar or hard to remember... and I'll definitely fix that. Thanks again, and I'll catch up some time soon on your story, I started it and it was really interesting! ^_^

Corrine,
This was really good. I absolutely loved the speaker's sarcasm (was it a she?). Great new begining. (Reminds me of X-men for some reason).

I need to ask: How do you pronounce Nhoj? That is a very creative name!

Another thing, some of the powers are too close. I would suggest that if they don't come in play later in the story, you might want to remove one or two (perhaps the mind readers because it's too close to mind controllers). If you want to keep all of them, perhaps try to move readers away from the other one because they are too close. Do you know what I mean?

I adore all the descriptions. They play out almost like a movie. I am glad you describe every nitty-gritty detail of how the speaker changes and how the runner reacts.

Great first chapter.

Keep Writing,
~Lyra

I LOVE IT!!!

xoxo
Kaitlyn