Vile Thoughts of Disgust - Comments

Oh my god, that was so depressing! I would have never thought of that as a handicap (holy crap! like you have no idea...) But it was so romantic and beautifully written. If you had entered this in the contest... I would have been like... Last place compared to this. Seroiusly! It's so awesomely written and perfectly captures Frank's emotions and wow... And Gerard was such a sweetie! :)

Wow. That is really all i have to say to this. And in a good way. Wow.

BRAVA!!!!!

that was amazing and the fact thatgerard was willingly gonna lose his erection shows alot

*Unbelievably

Sorry
TYPO ;D

OH MY FUCKING GOD

That Was So Ubelievable Amazing.
The Way You Described The Emotion, Everything.
It Was Just Pure.Fucking.Amazing.
I'm Mind Boggled
Just Awesome.
You Write So So So Well.
Pfft
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I must admit, anything I would want to write here would mimick exactly what Dorian Gray has written above me. Your portrayal of Frank's depression is outstanding, specifically the relation to him being like a puppet and fate being his puppeteer worked extremely well. I think by the end Gerard's character had realised Frank's problem with his inability to accept himself the way he is. I love the fact he doesn't really seem to get over that until right at the end, when he knows he has to put aside how he feels for the sake of his 'dedication' to Gerard.

The rape scene was inexplicit language wise, but the way you described it gave a violent picture in my mind. Sometimes I think that describing it bluntly rather than doing something over the top, as you did, works wonders in the readers mind. I found it very effective that Frank seemed to find the rape irrelevant when he discovered his problem. Whether his he would eventually remember the horror of his rape later on after recovering, who knows...

Gerard's character was an interesting one to say the least. He confused me sometimes, though we never really find out much about him as it's all from Frank's head. Gerard may have been described as the "human form of love and harmony", but I have a funny feeling his character isn't as rosy as Frank describes him. He seems to be the martyr in this one-shot, especially when he offers his own manhood so that he can be seen on the same level as Frank. Could this be because Gerard isn't as stupid as he seems, and that he knew the one thing Frank wouldn't want would be him impotent too?

Frank's character is one that I'm not sure how to view. He obviously believes in fate - much like myself. His ability to accept situations progresses throughout the chapter, for example having to deal with his parents dying, although he never really comes to terms with being impotent right until the last sentence, and even then we're not quite sure if he has come to terms with his handicap.

I loved it. You're obviously a very talented writer. :mrgreen:
xo

Holy shit! :cheese:
That was....amazing. What a long journey.
I must say that i love the way you wrote Franks depression, how he didn't feel like a man when he couldn't use his penis the way a man should. I love that he couldn't get it into his head that he could change his condition with some positive thinking, not until he knew what it was like and Gerard was willing to sacrifice his manhood as well, just so he could have Frank as an equal when if Frank wasn't even trying to get up, and get back to being a man.

Great job! :arms:

comment virginity!!
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that was so sad.
and touching.
"My heart melted, and I began to feel wanted again. His light was returning and it was beaming on me with a force I didn’t know: there was the purest love I would ever taste. I wanted to enjoy it for as long as I could."And oh my god i love the way u write.
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