Thank you so much! :)
June 15th, 2009 at 12:49pm
Hopefully, you're the kind who can handle criticism. :) But, this is for your own good, anyway.
Okay, I noticed that you misspelled some things, like "offensive", and "knew" (in your title), you can try changing that and instead of the 'dots' after the word 'life' being only two, it's best that you add a third one.
It had a nice flow. I like the way each paragraph starts with one word. :cute: Also try editing the punctuation (such as the commas and stuff). The editors scolded me for that, once.
We can’t live without each other but it’s not a mutual friendship.
^ See there, it's strongly recommended that you add a comma before the word "but"
Okay, so just edit/fix the punctuation and it'll become really good. You have a very good choice of words, I must say. Keep on writing. This is how everything starts, anyway. :hug:
