Just Burn the Photographs - Comments

Comment swap here. Let's see. The chapters I find a little too short, especially Chapter 5. There doesn't seem to be enough of anything going on in them. It's a bit of a nitpick, but don't be upset about it. It's my personal issue with it. There's also the redundant sentences such as "she decided to decide" and repeated thoughts like "black skirt and purple shirt" even thought you could have said "and she had her decision as he came out of the bathroom with a shirt on." The whole part with Alicia being in an accident felt tacked on, especially if it was meant to be taken out but you "couldn't" for some reason. There was nothing there but adding about a chapter and a half to the story. It was pretty useless. Essentially I'd treat it as "filler", not that the story needs any of it since the chapters are so short. The entire story is in no way bad, but it's of a typical romance trope. A love triangle of sorts. Honestly, I wasn't moved or surprised at the ending. Again, a lot of this was very "by the book" so to speak. Nothing unique made it stand out at all and I feel that's where it falls flat.

I really liked this story, it kept me interested from start to finish. I liked the love triangles you put in with your own ideas. This was very well thoughtout, and Im glad I read it. Very good plot you gave, with showing details of the characters and the setting, and what not. :) Very good job and i look forward to reading more of your work.

I adored this from the first chapter to the last. I love the whole story line of a love triangle and you put the perfect spin on it to make it your own. I also really like how Matt still cares so much about Ellie and still loves her even though she hadn't loved him back right away. I liked how you wrote the internal struggle Ellie was having with herself vs being with Matt and having that true relationship or having Gerard despite the problems he had or has. It was cute how she ended with the guy she truly did love and how all the signs they say pointed to each other. I've never been one to read music fan fictions but I'm happy I got to read this one and maybe I'll look around for more in the future. Awesome job with this story and good luck with any other stories you may post in the future.

Comment swapping galore here! I'm just doing the first chapter since I don't have tons of time, so here goes:

First off, "argued back" is redundant. No need to put the back since you can't really argue forward :P
Secondly, while you have a fantastic plot start here (way to ensure that the reader knows setting, character, and conflict right away! Props!) I think you could stand to study the "Show, don't tell" concept in writing. It just feels like to much is being told to me and I don't have to picture anything for myself, which can sometimes alienate your reader and make them bored. We like a challenge!
And also, I agree with alone together's comment about your formatting. The colors make it hard to take this seriously as a written work. Not that you can't show your uniqueness. Just let it shine through the words not the visual aspects of the page.

Other than that I liked it a lot and will return to read more.

Hello, I too am from the comment swap! :D So you're conversations are fine, but I agree with AnaShadows about the details. Your punctuation seems pretty spot on as well, which I praise you for, it's getting hard to find a grammatically correct story.

About the details, here's a hint someone once told me. Go back to your story, or chapter, a few days after you finished it and reread. Most of the time you can find a few places for more description.

All in all it was pretty well done!

Hello(: Comment swap brought me here. The story wasn't my type personally because I don't usually read about Gerard and Frankie. I do have a couple of comments. I'm being completely honest here, and am not trying to be rude.

I think the story would have been better if there was a lot more detail, like the dream scenery changes. Where she ended up after the changes should be more detailed.
And I agree with Loor. I think the story was a bit rushed. I had done it before and didn't notice it until someone told me about it themselves.
Hope this helped(:

Comment swap brought me here here and now I'm going to give you a comment! (: aha. (:

First things first, I do realize that this has been written a long time ago, and I'm commenting a bit late, but I think comments are an important part of a story Comments make people happy, and it's a nice feeling when someone gives you a comment. You know?

Unfortunately, I'll only be commenting on the first chapter, since I don't usually read these types of stories, but it's nice to have a change sometimes. It's surprising because I actually liked this. Usually, these stories always have a dark theme to it so I can never read it. Dark and sexual...things (but, actually, I don't really mind sexual) aha, wow that sounded kind of weird.

Just one thing, the layout is kind of blinding. This is a nice story and you've done a really good job, with it! (: -claps hands- hehe <3

So I've just finished reading the first ten chapters. I definitely like the plot in this story. A struggling girl trying to find love is something a lot people can relate to. I do feel, however, that the story is a bit rushed. Events are rushed. They're at a venue, on the road, at her parents, her sister gets an accident, ... Things happen really fast, too fast in my opinion. I feel this story would be more enjoyable if it was a bit more worked out.

Also, the red font is hard to read against the black/grey background, just so you know.

But overall, I do like the idea of this story, I just think it could use a bit more work.

I liked how you didn't go too much into explaining things (even the little parts); it pulls the reader into the story by having to figure out the history between them and about their relationship (or at least what they both want it to be. The descriptions were amazing by the way. I'm most certainly subscribing to this story and commenting it as well.

Geeze, Matt Sanders. said everything that really needed to be said. The only thing I would recommend is to edit your layout. I know the new mibba is a pain. I still can't make a layout to save my life, but I am getting better and its just a tad bit hard to read your story. But like I said, everything else is amazing.

I was brought here by the comment swap feature!

The summary definitely interested me. I like reading stories that relate to actual struggles every day people go through, as well as the character's actual struggles (referring to Gerard's drinking problem during the Revenge era). It shows you're a true fan and that's pretty cool. :)

I also agree with a7xloversyngirl, when she mentioned the fact you had long chapters. That was really something that made it even more enjoyable. Your descriptions were very vivid and understandable.

I'm a hopeless romantic, quite honestly, so I really enjoyed this. The only thing that I can think of that was just a little bit of an issue was the background you chose in the story section. It kind of made it hard for me to read, so I switched to the default layout. Of course, it's not really a big deal, as I was still able to read it all. But I just thought I would throw that out there.

Other than that, this was very good. I'm glad I was brought here, and I'm definitely going to subscribe so I'll know when the sequel comes! ^_^.

I don't usually read band fiction stories but I thought you wrote this really well. The layout was kind of distracting and difficult to read at times, so that is something you might want to think about changing.
I think the ending was really nice and wrapped up the story really well! You did a really nice job!

I really find this story quite interesting so far, though I haven't gotten to read all the chapters yet. I will continue soon once I have the time. I just thought I should leave a comment beforehand. I really enjoy your way of writing too! :)

Comment swap brought me here , and I must say that it was nice reading a COMPLETE story for a change x)

Your story is pretty good . You describe everything really well , and also I loved the fact that you had LONG chapters in the story , and you explained everything essential to the story .

Favorite scene , of course , would be the moment they met - after Gerard called her - :3 I'm just a romantic at heart , can't help it xP

Overall , GREAT job :)

Hii !!! :) Your story is really goooood :) I loved how you described the moment when they met again- after Gerard called - and generally speaking it's a really well written story ;) Great job :D .

Not bad like it :)

I love this story :)

This is really good, you should update. :)

I really like it,
so you should update.
=)

I WANT A COOKIE!!!!
I also like the story.