Nobody's Boy - Comments

I reaaaaalllllyyy like this ^^
even though you havent updated it in over a year....

April's Fool:

I still read this! :)

People would find it easier to read if you spaced out your speech a little like for example:

"Hello Sean," Gavin said. "How are you?"

"I'm a little bored," Sean replied.

"Let's go to the beach then!" Gavin grinned.

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Okay that was random but that's how it should be done :) Hope the advice is okay :) I like this and I want to make it so more people read it so yeah :)
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Yeah, i know- its just when i write my stories on word i indent each paragraph and when i transfer it to mibba all the indents disappear so it turns into one long annoying paragraph. So I'm gunna just do double space next time.
Thanks for the advice though :D
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I still read this! :)

People would find it easier to read if you spaced out your speech a little like for example:

"Hello Sean," Gavin said. "How are you?"

"I'm a little bored," Sean replied.

"Let's go to the beach then!" Gavin grinned.

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Okay that was random but that's how it should be done :) Hope the advice is okay :) I like this and I want to make it so more people read it so yeah :)
xxx

Updates..? Please =D

i like (:
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Eehee, i likes :) but just one thing? maybe things shouldn't move too fast, like in the story? i can see these 2 are gonna fall in love so just, dont do it all in one chapter. iv seen stories that do that and its like :yawn:

bit of advice there, hope you dont take it the wrong way i'm beng nice i promise :)

keep going xx

Ok, this is fantastic!
I love the storyline, and I love the beginning.

I thought it'd be Sean that was the rich boy, but you shocked me, it was really good. :) x