Bringing Back the Past - Comments

That was a really good story. You have me hooked. I can't wait to see the next chapter.

okay, so apparently i have lost my mind and i didn't actually leave you a comment. well, what i had originally intended to say was...

like radio;whoaluv! i noticed a few grammatical errors, nothing big. but other than that, the story is well written. to be honest though, i found that the first chapter flowed much nicer; it had better sentence structure and grace.

i can't point out specifics at the moment, but if you'd like me to you can ask, of course.

other than that, you've gotten me interested. if readers if what you're hoping to get, i would post the next few chapters very soon. otherwise people may assume you won't get around to it, or they may lose interest.

as for me, i'll be waiting to read the next chapter. so, update soon? :]

No, thanks a lot, actually. The story was originally started as me writing as Anna, and I still need to go through and fix the ones I missed. Thanks for reminding me! :-)

Sorry; I sounded rude. It's honestly a good story; just needs to be...worked on a little =]

I remember what it was like to write my first 3rd person p.o.v. story. It took me a month to get it right.

so, nothing wrong with this story except for 2 things.
Like i mentioned in another comment; double space.

Also, I've noticed that you'll say something like 'Anna felt much better with the hot water running over my body.' I know that's not exactly how you stated it, but it is an example. I was just...yeah.