Hey I really like your story! There are a couple mistakes in the context but nothing that can't be fixed. I think it would make a good extended story if you're willing to do so.
March 1st, 2009 at 12:24am
Untouchable Desire - Comments
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Hey I really like your story! There are a couple mistakes in the context but nothing that can't be fixed. I think it would make a good extended story if you're willing to do so.March 1st, 2009 at 12:24am
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Love.
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Okay, you most definitely must make this into a full story. If not, I am coming for you.
I really love the descriptions of everything.February 26th, 2009 at 04:38am -
I like this story. I like the setting, the honestness of it. I hope you will make a full story of this. It's really good.February 24th, 2009 at 07:36pm
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If you don't make this thing a full story, I'll hunt you down and hold your family hostage until you change your mind.
And besides, I've already subscribed, so now you have to keep writing.
And I'll get all my friends to subscribe as well.
In case you missed what I am getting at here, I have fallen in love with this story. You're writing talent is unlike any other I have seen on this site (and even in many published books).
So keep at it, or I'll cry.
(P.S. I loved the line "...smelly children made of stretched skin and jetting bones..."
Beautiful descriptive language.)February 24th, 2009 at 05:38am
