We're Still so Young and Desperate for Attention - Comments

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I really like your story:)
Update soon please? :D

Sunber:

Favourite lines: “Steven, you can let go of her now.”

“I'm good,” he said and I rolled my eyes. “Where's the birthday boy?” He asked and she shot him a look.
--- Ha ha! That’s cute, I like when guys do that. Sometimes you’re like “You’re an impossible flirt” but I usually like it… lol.

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“Oh my god,” Stella said, walking over with Lilah. “Those guys are so creepy. They keep like, checking Lilah and I out, and one even tried to hit on Sunnie.”
---WOOH! Sunnie! :D I’m totally waiting for reference to MY kid…

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“Shut up, Siska. You're short little ass couldn't kick shit,” I told her and she turned to look at me with her eyebrow raised.

“You wanna bet?” she asked and I laughed before she tried to launch herself at me, but Kingston just knocked her backwards with his foot.

“Sit down, Lil' Biz, you ain't scaring anybody,” he said and she pouted, leaning against Gaby.
---HA HA HA HA HA! That was hilarious.

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Yes, I just pick a funny line and use it as the title
---I didn’t even choose that line as one of my favourites! Lol! (Your title line) I read the title, so it just passed over me to even use it. Lol :D ILY!
Sunny-Lee <3

Haha, I love when guys do that. It's all like, "why you such a damn flirt?"
And just wait, I haven't gotten to your children yet.

Favourite lines: “Steven, you can let go of her now.”

“I'm good,” he said and I rolled my eyes. “Where's the birthday boy?” He asked and she shot him a look.
--- Ha ha! That’s cute, I like when guys do that. Sometimes you’re like “You’re an impossible flirt” but I usually like it… lol.

AND

“Oh my god,” Stella said, walking over with Lilah. “Those guys are so creepy. They keep like, checking Lilah and I out, and one even tried to hit on Sunnie.”
---WOOH! Sunnie! :D I’m totally waiting for reference to MY kid…

AND

“Shut up, Siska. You're short little ass couldn't kick shit,” I told her and she turned to look at me with her eyebrow raised.

“You wanna bet?” she asked and I laughed before she tried to launch herself at me, but Kingston just knocked her backwards with his foot.

“Sit down, Lil' Biz, you ain't scaring anybody,” he said and she pouted, leaning against Gaby.
---HA HA HA HA HA! That was hilarious.

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Yes, I just pick a funny line and use it as the title
---I didn’t even choose that line as one of my favourites! Lol! (Your title line) I read the title, so it just passed over me to even use it. Lol :D ILY!
Sunny-Lee <3

awesome update

Thanks for updating! It was excellent.
Sometimes it's hard to remember who is who but then I just go check your journal. It's really helpful.

I think you should sell Steven's towel on Ebay. [=
I wanna know who has a crush on himmm!
I'm just waiting for someone to get prego! hahahaha.

cute update

Sunber:

Favourite Lines: “What the hell, Steven?” I yelled when I saw my cousin's clothes on the floor. He peeked his head out from behind the curtain, looking at me wide-eyed in fake surprise.

“What the hell are you doing in here, Gaby? Can't I take a shower by myself?” he yelled back, failing to hide the grin on his face.

“Shut the fuck up! You're supposed to take showers in the other bathroom, not mine!” I yelled and he shrugged.
--- HA HA HA! I like how he was just randomly in HER bathroom and then HE gets mad at HER for invading his privacy… lol.

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“Shut up. Steven's annoying. I'm nothing like him,” I answered, rolling my eyes yet again. “And you'd think so too if you had to live with him for six years. He couldn't even speak English when he moved in.”
--- lol, she gets so offended. It’s cute :)

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“Steven, would it kill you to get dressed in the bathroom?” I asked, raising an eyebrow at the sight of my cousin walking out in one of my pink towels.
--- HA HA HA! Pink towel… ‘Nuff said.

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“You're such a freak,” I told him. “And I'm going to have to burn that towel, because your junk touched it.”

“My junk has touched more surfaces in this house than you think, so if you really wanna go that far, burn the motherfucker down,” he told me and I shuddered.
--- HA HA HA! I LOVE STEVEN! He’s so random and completely confident in himself. :) I just love him.

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“Whatever. Remember, seven,” he said to me, then turned to Kyleigh. “And you, wear something nice. This could be a really good night for you.”
---Awhhh! He’s such a smooth talker! Lol! I love him :)
No, i actually dind't click the "Click me if confused about characters" i was going to, but then i was too excited to put my comment up. lol.
Stassi= Stacy?
Sunny-Lee <3

Hhaa, I think Sunny found a new favorite character.
I love Steven, haha. He's fun to write.
^^ And that was awkward to type....

I know. I was excited about everything.
Yepp.

Favourite Lines: “What the hell, Steven?” I yelled when I saw my cousin's clothes on the floor. He peeked his head out from behind the curtain, looking at me wide-eyed in fake surprise.

“What the hell are you doing in here, Gaby? Can't I take a shower by myself?” he yelled back, failing to hide the grin on his face.

“Shut the fuck up! You're supposed to take showers in the other bathroom, not mine!” I yelled and he shrugged.
--- HA HA HA! I like how he was just randomly in HER bathroom and then HE gets mad at HER for invading his privacy… lol.

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“Shut up. Steven's annoying. I'm nothing like him,” I answered, rolling my eyes yet again. “And you'd think so too if you had to live with him for six years. He couldn't even speak English when he moved in.”
--- lol, she gets so offended. It’s cute :)

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“Steven, would it kill you to get dressed in the bathroom?” I asked, raising an eyebrow at the sight of my cousin walking out in one of my pink towels.
--- HA HA HA! Pink towel… ‘Nuff said.

AND

“You're such a freak,” I told him. “And I'm going to have to burn that towel, because your junk touched it.”

“My junk has touched more surfaces in this house than you think, so if you really wanna go that far, burn the motherfucker down,” he told me and I shuddered.
--- HA HA HA! I LOVE STEVEN! He’s so random and completely confident in himself. :) I just love him.

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“Whatever. Remember, seven,” he said to me, then turned to Kyleigh. “And you, wear something nice. This could be a really good night for you.”
---Awhhh! He’s such a smooth talker! Lol! I love him :)
No, i actually dind't click the "Click me if confused about characters" i was going to, but then i was too excited to put my comment up. lol.
Stassi= Stacy?
Sunny-Lee <3

Sunny-Lee:

Favourite lines: “Well, jesus, are you afraid of the Cobra kids or something? Just go up there. Gaby won't let anyone give you shit, and Kyleigh's obviously kicking someone's ass,” I said, finally hearing the ding of the coffee pot and grabbing another cup to fill it. I turned away to get some cream to pour in the coffee, but when I turned around, the cup was gone. I turned around to see Kingston walking out of the room, my cup in hand. “What the fuck, Kings?”
--- Ha ha ha… you call him Kings… She swears… the Cobra kids… I could go on…

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“HEY HEY HEY!” Stella screamed.

“My love is electric, YEAH!” Gaby continued, laughing when she saw me walking in. “Lillie!”

“Gaby!” I giggled as she threw her arms around me. “What are you doing?”
--- I like how they’re singing… I was totally like Gaby’s a girl?!?! Because I was pronouncing it Gabe-ey and then it got confirmed…so yeah… of COURSE Gaby is a girl. Lol

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“Damien, responsible?” I asked with an eyebrow raised.

“That's exactly what I said!” Stella exclaimed.
--- O_O What’s Damien USUALLY like?

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“Open the door, Blackinton!” I yelled back. I heard it unlock as Lilah peeked out, then opened the door all the way. “You guys need to hurry up. Other people need to use this- holy shit! What happened to my bathroom?!” I asked taking in the mess in front of me.

“Talk to Gaby,” Rissa replied, applying more eyeliner underneath her blue eyes.

“Gabrielle Brooklynn Saporta! You better get your little Latino ass in here and pick up my bathroom!” I yelled and she came to the door with a smile on her face.

“Get Beckett's little Caucasian ass in her to help me then,” she replied, moving swiftly into the room to start picking up stuff.
--- HA HA HA! I liked the whole Latino/Caucasian ass statements :D

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“Did you conquer D's ass?” I asked and she nodded.

“He said I had a fat ass. I bet you think my ass if fat now, don't you Damien?” she asked, and he rolled his eyes.
--- Ha ha ha… I like all this fighting… although this is a very hectic scene… with A LOT of people… it’s a little overwhelming.

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“Oh shit!” she exclaimed, jumping up quickly and almost hitting Stassi in the face with the iron. The blonde eyed her closely as she set the straightener down. “My ass is vibrating.”

“That's dirty!” Stella yelled, grabbing her make-up to put it on.
---Ha ha ha, I say that all the time… actually, I usually say “My inner thigh is vibrating…”

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Click me if confused about characters
--- *giggles* Click me… you’re funny :)
Sunny-Lee <3

Haha, pronounce it like Gabbie. I didn't think it would be that confusing. Do you know how to pronounce Stassi?
Haha, yeah tha was alot of people. And I was trying not to confuse you, but it'll get easier I promise.
Haa, Megan always has her phone in her pocket or on her knee whne she's texting, and when i'm sitting next to her I can feel it when someone texts her, and I'll look at her and say, "you're vibrating". And the whole "my ass is vibrating" is usually "my boobs are vibrating" in my group of friends.
Haha, you clicked it, didn't you?

Favourite lines: “Well, jesus, are you afraid of the Cobra kids or something? Just go up there. Gaby won't let anyone give you shit, and Kyleigh's obviously kicking someone's ass,” I said, finally hearing the ding of the coffee pot and grabbing another cup to fill it. I turned away to get some cream to pour in the coffee, but when I turned around, the cup was gone. I turned around to see Kingston walking out of the room, my cup in hand. “What the fuck, Kings?”
--- Ha ha ha… you call him Kings… She swears… the Cobra kids… I could go on…

AND

“HEY HEY HEY!” Stella screamed.

“My love is electric, YEAH!” Gaby continued, laughing when she saw me walking in. “Lillie!”

“Gaby!” I giggled as she threw her arms around me. “What are you doing?”
--- I like how they’re singing… I was totally like Gaby’s a girl?!?! Because I was pronouncing it Gabe-ey and then it got confirmed…so yeah… of COURSE Gaby is a girl. Lol

AND

“Damien, responsible?” I asked with an eyebrow raised.

“That's exactly what I said!” Stella exclaimed.
--- O_O What’s Damien USUALLY like?

AND

“Open the door, Blackinton!” I yelled back. I heard it unlock as Lilah peeked out, then opened the door all the way. “You guys need to hurry up. Other people need to use this- holy shit! What happened to my bathroom?!” I asked taking in the mess in front of me.

“Talk to Gaby,” Rissa replied, applying more eyeliner underneath her blue eyes.

“Gabrielle Brooklynn Saporta! You better get your little Latino ass in here and pick up my bathroom!” I yelled and she came to the door with a smile on her face.

“Get Beckett's little Caucasian ass in her to help me then,” she replied, moving swiftly into the room to start picking up stuff.
--- HA HA HA! I liked the whole Latino/Caucasian ass statements :D

AND

“Did you conquer D's ass?” I asked and she nodded.

“He said I had a fat ass. I bet you think my ass if fat now, don't you Damien?” she asked, and he rolled his eyes.
--- Ha ha ha… I like all this fighting… although this is a very hectic scene… with A LOT of people… it’s a little overwhelming.

AND

“Oh shit!” she exclaimed, jumping up quickly and almost hitting Stassi in the face with the iron. The blonde eyed her closely as she set the straightener down. “My ass is vibrating.”

“That's dirty!” Stella yelled, grabbing her make-up to put it on.
---Ha ha ha, I say that all the time… actually, I usually say “My inner thigh is vibrating…”

AND

Click me if confused about characters
--- *giggles* Click me… you’re funny :)
Sunny-Lee <3

cute start

This seems so interesting! Can't wait to read more. :mrgreen:

I love it! Please keep updating. I'm addicted to your writing. :]

Dez:

I was a little confused too, so many people!
Haha, I love it!

I love the line:
“Gabrielle Brooklynn Saporta! You better get your little Latino ass in here and pick up my bathroom!” I yelled and she came to the door with a smile on her face.

“Get Beckett's little Caucasian ass in her to help me then,” she replied, moving swiftly into the room to start picking up stuff.

I'll tell you guys what I'm gonna do.

I'll make a journal to tell you which characters are who, so you know them by full names and by nicknames, and put the link in the next chapter.
I was a bit worried people would get confused.

I was a little confused too, so many people!
Haha, I love it!

I love the line:
“Gabrielle Brooklynn Saporta! You better get your little Latino ass in here and pick up my bathroom!” I yelled and she came to the door with a smile on her face.

“Get Beckett's little Caucasian ass in her to help me then,” she replied, moving swiftly into the room to start picking up stuff.

I am so confused. Who is who?
But other than that it seems like it's going to be awesome!