March 2nd, 2009 at 08:59am
You have such a poetic prose here. It was incredible to read such an amazing stories; besides the fact that I am fascinated with ancient mythology.
A few tips for improving your incredible imagination: Don't throw commas everywhere; it makes the gorgeous story look messy; besides, you don't want to deal with all those run-on sentences! Trust me, those things are a hell of a thing to improve.
Also, watch out for sentences that are lacking of verbs; the rules on mibba are pretty tight on those things, and you need to watch out for those kinds of things.
Besides all that, I congratulate you!
I love the idea; how you thought it up I'm not quite sure.
And beautiful use of the whole Artemis/ Orion/ Kali etc.