I think that you being pissed when you wrote the first chapter made the emotions stand out like that. The way you wrote this was brilliant and I loved everything about this. Cyanide... awful name xD
OH MY GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! D: D: D: D: D: this is amazing!!! but scary!!! OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 i hoope he doesnt rape her.... AMAZING JOB!!!!! UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!
GREAT updates. I'm sad that I didn't read them sooner. Chapters fifteen and sixteen are interesting and well-written, and your cliffhanger was, like, expert. I can't wait for the next chapter.