The Perfect Paper Airplane - Comments

i like this!! i think i'll try doing this. it could be like therapy.

holy mo fo. This rocked. TOTALLY. like a rock in rock paper scissors. You are a great writer. some of your sentances remind me of my own writing. LOVE your shorts. check out some of mine??

Excellent idea. I love the way you opened the story with: Everything is becoming too much. Life is compressing me into a tiny box void of much needed oxygen. It was said so perfectly in my opinion and I could relate to it in many ways.

Though this is a simple line it was my favourite: Meticulously, I folded it. Carefully aligning the corners, this small piece of who I am became a paper airplane.

Short but beautiful.
Keep on keepin' on. :)

I'll keep reading this one!!! It's interests me, the idea

I'll keep reading this one!!! It's interests me, the idea

this is a very good story, i really like it :)
Great at describing things.

Huh...no spelling errors, -very- nice descriptions, and easily capable of pulling the reader in to feel the emotions you portray. And the layout is fitting, very fitting. The sun in the background, almost (dusk/dawn) with the paper airplane being thrown, a perfect climax moment caught in a picture, especially when partnered with your piece.

Extremely good work, my friend. The way you write has a certain elegance about it that lends me to believe you could go far with the written word, even if it remains these amazing short stories. Bravo!

Crafted precisely into perfection, this paper airplane had a look about it that seemed to yearn for flight.

I really like this; it draws you in.

Vigorously, I write down everything my mind can think of, everything my heart has ached for.

Another well written sentence that makes you want to read more.

I really liked this story. It’s very good and draws you in with the sentences.

To write down all your problems and make them fly away is such a wonderful thought x)

I think this was beautifully written though. I loved the imagery and the choice of words. Very good :cute:

I love your title :].
I also liked the idea of writing down all your troubles and watch them fly away (Even though they can't). It's nice :]