Love Life - Comments

There was a sound of knocking at the front door right before I went to bed. -- first of all, an amazing opening line. Immeadiatly drew me in,making me want to read on. That's always a good thing :D
Surprise, surprise! -- I'm not sure if this was deliberate, but I could almost here the sarcasm in his voice, made me laugh :P
“Yeah, awake with your boxer on. What you are wearing just now is my most favorite of clothes that I have ever seen you with.” -- :tehe: boysecks? ;)
He said all of this while he beat me. He said he will kill me soon because I’m nothing. He said words to me; I hope he wouldn’t again. -- o.o woah. nice use of words there. Very strong and emotive. well done.
Maybe you don’t know, but he’s a real pervert. He gives almost everyone in this planet a blowjob. -- :tehe: I love how you change the tone so quickly. From serious, to laughing, it makes a good contrast throughout.
Even his own father. He fucked his father hard, until he died. -- Uhmmm... :P very original :D
I belong to you, silly. That’s why I’m here, to make you notice that I’m yours and you’re mine, forever. I want you to realize that you were made for me and I was made for you. -- awww this line was so sad :( Very beautifully put though, with a hint of a threat in it. Nice.
The silence was killing me. It was like the silence was gripping on my neck, trying to end my life by strangling me. -- Wow, I liked this line, but at the end you didn't really need the It was a very uncomfortable silence. as it took away slightly from the powerful line before.
You closed the chapter of my new start, telling me I have to begin the next chapter soon, -- This was pretty, and had a good imagery to it :D
“It’s my hobby to use people as my whore. I need to fuck someone once in a while, but I never have a proper boyfriend.” -- Awww what a cute/kinky confession. Me liked ^^ :
“I’m happy I don’t have to write a different chapter again. Marry me, would you?”

“I will.” -- Yay! Finally a frerard with a happy ending :D I loved this, it was so sweet, yet the whole 'whore' twist to it made it all sinister. Good job.
The only thing I can suggest is checking your grammar a bit, but nothing serious.
well done :D

-x-

I love it. It's so sweet and heartbreaking at the same time. In a way I didn't want him to accept the proposal, because he had been used. But it had me torn. I wasn't sure if I wanted him to say 'yes' or in this case 'I will' because what if it just happens all over again?

This is really good. Very very good. I'm sorry this comment isn't way longer, but school has drained me today. I especially liked the banner, so Kudos to whoever made that.

xo