well tanks alot ! can you do a banner with a nazi camp in the background and the title on it !! maybe with a little pictre of olivia ?? x sorry for late reply !! :(
I didn't realise that you had a new story up until now... you seriously need to do a little self-promoting. :P anywho, I think it's great. You really show the thoughts of Olivia and what she sees and feels... at least that's how I see it. Also great beginning. Starting a story with a dialogue is a good way to capture the reader *subscribes* Update?