Alphabet Soup. - Comments

Why oh why would you turn down alphabet soup off Joe?
That girl is ker-azzzzy.
But again, mega sweet :tehe: Well done.

I quite like this. I didn't think the girl was a bitch at all frankly.
She was dissapointed. I think we all would be if you were expecting something big for your birthday and then it was all taken away.

I also think it was a bit offending to say that. :shifty I mean it's about the author as she said and it's innaproriate.

i quite liked this story. :tehe: I thought it was rather sweet and cute. And the writeing was amazing also. :cute:

STORY REVIEW GAME

I'm going to review this as I read. Just a heads up.

-“We’re still gonna have an awesome day,” he muttered, pulling out a seat for himself. I'm not quite sure why, but I'm getting the vibe that he doesn't want to be there. I'm also catching the vibe that the girl is a fan? I'm not sure yet, because the situation isn't explained in the first paragraph. But the way you wrote that he muttered the second line of dialogue gives me the impression that he is tired and pretty much done with the situation at hand.
-The little girl. I immediately don't like her. She's just... for lack of a better word bitchy. She sounds spoiled and just -- like the girls on thats show My Super Sweet 16. The type of person that gets everything they want and when they don't they throw a fit. So the minute the girl goes off about how she doesn't have a cake and blah blah blah. I don't like her. If that was your goal... good job.
-He frowned at the teenage girl; at least he was making as effort. I like Joe, so far though. He's trying as you said. and I think as should be an. Just pointing that out. Joe just seems loveable in this which I think is nice. They're personalities crash, which is also a plus for me.
-The way he spelled out Happy Birthday in the soup was cute. And the way the girl just looked at it. UGH! I HATE HER! I CAN'T STAND THIS LITTLE GIRL!!!!! but I'm thinking that she is supposed to be that way, and that she is not a fan girl. She is, however, making me want to rip my hair out.
-So, he got her a puppy. I thought that was nice. and the way he tried to cover up the soup as a joke... that was a little funny. The way the girl was afraid to be nice was just... well.. I don't like her at all so I think that she could have tried. But I could be biased seeing as she's not my favorite character.

This was okay for me. It wasn't my favorite but I didn't hate it either. It was a nice read though. It kept my mind occupied. Good job with the charcters.

Heh, the title took me by surprise, so I disided to read it. I'm not a big Jonas brothers fan, thought. (oh, the people I replaced them with, hehehe... sorry).

Wasn't as bad as I thought (being originally a fanfic)... Oh, I like the layout, too.

Aw, that was so cute.
I love it.
Very adorable.
Ten/ten stars.

Joe drabble, finished.
Non-romantic pairing.

Come on.
You can't expect me to write a pedo story between a nineteen year old guy and a thirteen year old.
That's weird, even for me. :tehe:

Enjoy <3333