Doomsday - Comments

I feel this si important...sue me if it's not.

"I started to think about how badly I wished I wasn't human. It would have made sense, the weirdness, the refusal to obey simple rules, the escalation of cleaning to philosophical heights, the feeling of being in the wrong skin, that would have all made sense if I was a Time Lady or whatever."
I feel and agree with that entirely. I wish I was a Time Lady. It'd be the ultimate everything.

....The Doctor never came in time and now "She's dead."
Look what you made me do.

WOW!!!!!! I loved this story. Very emotional, good description. The ending was a shock I was like OMG!!!!

Doomsday

I thought it was great. You had emotion, and descriptions. Everything was flowing very nicely. It left me feeling creepy though. The ending was gasp!

All I have to say is "wow". There are so many stories about almost committing suicide, but having one go through with it is something else! You have a great way with words. Reading this story was like reading a book.

I'd love to give you some constructive criticism, but I couldn't find anything wrong. The only thing I can say is keep writing.

=[ so sad... and i have to agree with pretty much everything sruti said...

you write so well! [=

I want to tell you how beautiful and amazing that piece was because it was beautiful and amazing and while it was still your writing, there's something different about it that I can't place.

But that creeped me out far beyond anything. There's stories on here about people killing themselves until MCR or GD comes along to tell them there's more to life, but this was more real than any of them.

And there's so many pieces of you in that story that it honestly did scare me a bit. It's the kind of poeticly commonplace suicide that only you would choose.