Water Fae - Comments

Coolll!

Like everyone has said, the dialogue is perfect :)

Simon/Will ahhhh. The best. I forsee many an angsty awesome story happening ;)

I LOVE YOU ALISON!! HAPPY BIRTHDAY!! and yes I must comment EVERYTHING with bday love.

EEK I already reviewed this.
But I do have say I like Dialouge between the details.

I love this.
The dialogue felt so natural and it was a lovely read.
Your characters are so believable. Simon reminds me a lot of my best friend. :tehe:
And I enjoyed the little twist at the end. :tehe:

You're a great writer. I'm glad I read this. :cute:

i like it its cute and fluffy!!!

That was an awesome story!

I really liked how easily the two characters could respond to each other in a conversation. Sometimes, some authors can't pull off conversations like those. :lmfao

I DO BUHLEIVE IN FAERIES! :XD

Will had convinced Simon that they should go down to the river and look for water fae. “Faeries aren’t real.”

*Sniggers* Wonder how he convinced him

Undine....UNDIES!!!! That is the first thing I thought of hahahahahaha :shifty

“Yeah, well, shut up.” Brilliant argument absolutely fantabulous!!


“Brilliant argument there. STEAL MY LINE BITCH!!



LOL, the word code for that is Bangin.....

“Do you have a blanket in that bag?” ....or do you want to just have sex on the grass? Either is awesome....

Mister I-don’t-believe-in-faeries-yet-I-know-a-suspiscious-amount-about-them.” I can just imagine the dude spouting off that at their marriage ceremony. It would amuse thy a lot.

“What a long last name I appear to have.”

“What large ears you have.”

What a big penis you have....oh wait, did I say that out loud??

stuff.”

“And stuff.”

“Fuck off.”

Well I was hoping for 'fucking' actually no I wasn't, they're girls. AGH. *pushes yucky mental images into Alisons head where they will actually be appreciated.*

....I didn't know what a Kelpie was. I thought it was a type of dog. OH POTATOES WHY AM I UNEDUMACATED?!?!



You know a place like that, then?” Oh I know a deep place that nobody can see

Once they get back to the river bank where the bag is, a thought occurs to Will. “Did you really see something in the water, before?”

Simon laughs shortly. “No, that was just a fish. Like you said.”

I AM STILL CONVINCED THAT IS A MYSTERIOUS CREEPY ENDING!!!! AND THAT IT HAS MEANING!!!! Maybe you did it subconciously, cuz ya know, you're just THAT awesome :file:

This was so cute and gorgeous.
I hope everyone was nice to it.

For some reason it gives me the craving to go blow bubbles....

LOVE!!