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Oh, and one more thing. Unfortunately it's bad but it's constructive criticism. :) TH's English was a bit too good for my taste. They were, what, eighteen or so in this story? The twins are pretty bad at English although it's passable, and Tom knew all these American slang phrases and such and it was frustrating. >.< If you had made him speak a bit more like Julia's mother, that would have been better. *shrug* Your story, though. :3

Okay, so I just read this whole thing in the span of two days. I really, really liked it. It had just enough original twists to make it feel like it wasn't cliche or overdone.

There were a few things that bugged me, though. I'll get those out of the way. First of all, the spelling and grammar. I know, I know, they're not a huge deal. It did make it a little bit harder to read, though, and you might want to type your chapters on MS Word or something before you post them on Mibba, or use the spellcheck in the top left. I misunderstood some of the stuff you were saying because of certain errors and it makes it choppy and hard to understand. There were quite a few, but I've definitely seen worse and as long as you run a spellcheck, you should be good. Or get Mozilla Firefox. That has an automatic spellcheck even online. It's what I have and it keeps highlighting 'spellcheck' and 'Mibba' as misspelled words. XD

The second thing that bugged me was how distant Bill and Tom seemed. They didn't seem distant for normal brothers, they just seemed distant for twins. Distant for twins, I suppose, would basically be when they act like normal brothers. It's not a huge thing that you're required to change or I'll come after you with pitchforks and so on, but it made me sad how Tom could lie to Bill like that and Bill believed him. If you read/watch the interviews, you know that Bill and Tom both say they can tell anything to each other, no matter what. It's twins first, girls second. So I believe, had this been a real situation, Tom would have told Bill right away and he wouldn't have kept anything from him. That's just the way they are. And throughout the whole story, they just seemed kind of weird with each other, like normal brothers, and that made me uncomfortable. :/

Third and final thing was that Georg and Gustav made like one appearance in the story. I know it's hard to include them in a Kaulitz love story. I mean, I do that all the time -- leave them out, I mean. But it would have been good to see more of them, you know? Idk. That's just what I think.

The story overall was really good. I do like how you made her engaged and that was the ultimate conflict, because it wasn't something like they were trying to deny that they loved each other and it went that way for 83 chapters. Nope, you put a good plot twist in and I did find myself enjoying the drama, and even the sex, even though I usually hate Tom stories since I'm more of a Bill girl. The readers are right, you are the porn writer of Mibba. e.e
You should teach me. Because I'm writing sex in my story Dreaming in Neon Lights and I think it's awful. XD
Worst part is...it's with both twins. e.e
Ayayay. e.e

Anyway, I think the fact that I read all 83 chapters in two days speaks for itself. :)

just stayed up till nearly 4am reading this story, and i gotta say, it was totally worth it :) love it to bits. even though i was so engrossed in reading i dropped ketchup on the keyboard and only just realised now while typing and it got on my hand. fan-freaking-tastic. but seriously, loved your story.

This story was amazing. A twisted but beautiful story line that only you could think of; Tom kaulitz falls in love with someone he smoked pot with... honestly. Where did you get yourself such an awesome imagination?
It was funny but serious... and everything in between. and pretty much just overall it was amazing. Like I said before.
I think I've read nearly all your other stories... possibly all of them... so I'll be waiting for a new one! hahaha
... and I'll read and comment and all that shizz.... just as usual.

This story has blown me away. I'm so attatched to the characters and the plot that most people would say I'm unhealthy. Fair enough though cause you have one of those gifts where you can make anyone feel love, hate, sadness with just a few words. :tehe:

And damn I'm looking forward to this book! Even if I won't see it for another 3 years (who knows?!) it's already on my to do list. :cute:

I'm so proud of you. And this story. And I'm proud of myself for finding it in the first place. Back when you only had like 3 chapters posted. -blubbers- Makes me wanna cry lol.

OMG IT'S OVER!
:crazy:

But I still missed some comments along the way so I'll make them up now :P
Ch. 80:

Interesting chapter lmao. Didn't expect the whole hand job thing but hey, it works XD
I love the fact that they can tease/ play with each other in a non sexual manner (as well as sexual but that's not what I'm talking about at this moment lol) anyway I love how they can do that with each other and know that the other is joking it's sweet :cute:

Ch. 81

:lmfao
Epic beginning of that chapter!
Like I said, they know just how to mess with each other and be playful at the same time.
"had a same-sex sexual encounter.
Wtf? XD I can't imagine Tom "swinging that way" ever.

Awe how sweet. You know, for him being such a man-whore he really does have a soft side/ romantic/ sweet side. (ok I don't know if he's really like that in real life but the way you right about him is the way I imagine him)

Ch. 82

''Come and get me.'' I replied, matching his tone.
You can't say that to Tom Kaulitz and not expect him to come after you :file: That's like begging him to *cough* you know :XD
HOT DAMYUMM!
XD
That shows her not to tease Tom...

Ch. 83

Best. Ending. Ever.
I really enjoyed the fact that you went back and described their relationship and didn't just say "OMG I LOVE MAH TOMI KAULITZ!!!11!!1"
It was perfect, to say the least.

As always Shelby, you are one of my favorite authors. Your descriptions and the way you make the readers fall in love (or hate) with either the characters, the whole story line, or just plain everything that deals with the story is incredible. Good job.

I'm going to miss your fan-fics, but as soon as your book (which I'm anxiously waiting for, even if it won't be out any time soon) get's published; don't lie, you know it will :cute:
I'm going to buy it. (hell I'm going to help you sell them/ be your manager or whatever, remember? :lmfao I'll keep the crazy teenies away, too :XD

Okay, so here is my rant for the day.

My name is April and I have only been on mibba a short while. I tried giving my hand at a few stories and as reserched I tried to read some fani fictions to check out the other works mine would be joining. I came across your story and thought nothing of it.
It didn't appeal to me so I didn't read it. Lo and behold, one month later, I was bored as fuck with nothing to read. I came across your story and gave it a chance. three hours later, I was sitting in tears, laughter and pure happiness.
I subscribed, not wanting this rollercoster to end. Sadly, it has.
But here is the brightside. It had a perfect ending and was all around amazing.

I just want to thank you for being the person who could give me that emotional high even if at first I judged your story. This just shows you can never jusge a book by it's cover.

Thank you and I am glad I ahd the honor of reading thist story.

April aka Apple

AHHHHH I'm sad it's over but it was so good.

You are a great writer and I wish you the best of lucks with you book! :D

I absolutely LOVED the way you ended it! It was very well-rounded and I'm gunna have to read this again just because I loved it so much.

I loved how in the chapter title you named it "Chapter (Four) Eighty-Three". Very very cleaver! XD
I'm looking forward to your books and stories on here! :]

IMMA MISS THIS STORY!

Ps: I will be most definately be staying subscribed.

Nooooooo! I'll miss you!! Lmfao. This story... well, there's no words for a story this good. Whenever I got an email saying this story was updated, it made me happier. I know, I know. Cheesy, right? But it's true. I can't wait for your next fan-fic because, like all the rest of yours, it is destined to be amazing. Good luck on your book and if it does get published, you'll know at least one person (me) will buy it. : )

:O omg!!!!
sad, butt, GOOD LUCK!! =D i hope you doo awesome (:

I LOVED IT!!!!
you know i always love your work and look forward to your new stuff ;) I'll stay subscribed all the same, even though we're like best friends and i talk to you every day anyway xD
This has been a fun story and one that i must admit sprung a few tears on my part. you're great and i will most definately be purchasing anything you publish.
ISPAND FTW!!! xD

I feel like really sad now. I've always loved reading your stories, and now there aren't gonna be anymore )= But I want to wish you the best of luck about your book, and I really loved this story.

Go Shelby!
Good luck! =D

I'm kind of sad now. I love this story and do not want it to end. =( but all great things come to an end I guess. well good luck on your book and If you do get it published tell us so we can all go out and buy it!

awww i'm sad now.... I seriously did a bill clap everytime i was told it was updated!! I loved this story!