Effin' LOVE Chapter 4 - the lyrics in the story are amazing and even though the end is a little cliched (you know the stuff about the "new boy"), it's still a gripping story so far. You're building it up very well. I Love It!
Love Chapter 3: Lyrics. Great building up of the story and good to see that even though it's another writer, the style of writing doesn't differ enough to change the flow of the story. Very good.
OMFG, this is an AMAZING first chapter! I love anything with werewolves, vampires, zombies etc etc in, so this fits the bill perfectly. I love the style of writing; it's punchy and quick and I read it in literally a minute - this is a fantastic piece and I look forward to reading a lot more!