A Chronical of Life and Death - Comments

crayon-r-cool (100)

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im really liking this story, babe. itsbeautifully written. The way you have described everything is amazing. Cant wait to read the rest :)

April 11th, 2009 at 10:06am

HumbledMasquerade (100)

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OMG!!! this a really brilliant story you are a really talented writer well done cannot wait to read more
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April 6th, 2009 at 11:36pm

fen'harel (560)

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I am shocked that nobody had commented on this! This is amazing, of course you have some scattered errors around the writing, but those could be improved n_n

The narration is really interesting, as well as this job of hers. The way she hooked up clients with her descriptions of the lives she was about to sell made me smile. Such an experienced sales woman she was!

I think you've got me hooked on! You have gained yourself a reader. If you need any help on editing the errors, just ask; I'll gladly do it, because I see potential in this.

April 5th, 2009 at 07:51pm