The Back of a Gillikin Farmer's Truck - Comments

I want to steal the left hemisphere of your brain; I'm very jealous! Your writing style flows so well and is very unique. It reminded me very slightly of Chuck Palahniuk. I loved Ryan's sense of imagination and wonder, and you demonstrated it well. He reminded me of my own brother (also named Ryan). The British fly was the icing on the cake. I'll definitely read more of your work! Amazing!

Flyanese :3
::teehee::
Brendon drawing Ryan thoughts, adorable.
And Ryan's right, does the refrigerator ever get hungry? What does it eat? +_+

I thought that the opening paragraph was brilliant. It really shows the weird things that Ryan often thinks about and it gives him an extra bit of personality, like a real trait that a real person would have.

I really loved how sexual Brendon was in this story, how he was so open with the things he said about Ryan, such as wanting to bend him over a counter and jerking off to him and not being completely phased when Ryan walks in after having done it. The contrast between his nature and Ryan seeming rather innocent or coy towards his actions, was nice. Brendon came across as being very forward whereas Ryan was much more introverted.

The whole scene where Brendon is blowing Ryan and all Ryan can think about is the fly he was watching on the wall was just written amazingly well. It's just one of those small details that have a huge effect on the overall description of the scene.

The "You okay?" line was incredibly sweet, followed by Brendon pulling up Ryan's pants because it showed that Brendon did really care about him. The fact that Ryan compared it to being an elementary school kid was even better, because it made me think of a mother doing that to a child and Brendon's actions came across as completely caring and sweet.

The dream scene would have been quite odd had it not already been established that Ryan already had some pretty strange thoughts in his head. I did love the line about "of course the fly was British" because it just seemed funny and all too perfect.

Then again when Ryan starts thinking random thoughts out loud at the end, and Brendon just smiles at him was just too cute. It shows that he's used to Ryan doing that kind of thing and he really digs it, no matter how out there it is.

This is amazing! I just started reading your stories today, and I love your writting style. It just flows so well. How do you get the inspiration for this kind of stuff?
And I have to admit I was also wondering, what is is a Gillikin farmer?

I really liked this one. It kind of sparked some strange questions of my own.

Oh and like Melly Belly asked what is a Gillikin farmer and where did you get the inspiration for this one? Just the yawning? :cute:

I really liked this one.
I think the weirdness added something. It made it different.
Favorite line: I wonder if it’s calling me a prude in fly language, whatever that is. Flyanese, maybe. It made me smile. :cute:

Oh and what is a Gillikin Farmer?

You write the most amazing stories.

Hey. :cute:

This was really good. I especially loved the dream sequence, and the "This happened, this happened," when you wrote it.

I liked Ryan's thoughts throughout it. The avalanches and stuff. It was a very human write.

I need to read more of your stuff.

Also, since it was so odd, would you please explain it to me? Seeing as you wouldn't mind doing so.

:tehe:

This is one of my favorite pieces written by you.
Simply because it's just that weird.

This was (as always) fantastic. I laughed out loud for real, which doesn't happen often. I got a bit scared because I think like that a lot. :tehe:

Man, I've been waiting for a new piece from you for awhile, and you did not disappoint. I thought Ryan's little random thoughts were awesome.

Wow.
I love it.
I don't read that much any more, but wow.
This made me giggle.
You are very talented and I will have to read more of your stories in future.

-Kyla.

Oh, Druscilla, you are so amazing.
You're so talented!
I loved this. A lot.
I get so excited when I see one of your stories!

I think this is one of my favourite pieces by you, even though I haven't read all that many. The randomness of it all just really worked, I loved it. :XD

I loved how Brendon seems to start off all so innocent at the beginning; how he laughs at Ryan's imagination and the way he draws the ideas seems so childlike... And then we discover he's almost a sex pest, and Ryan's the innocent one. :tehe:

I wonder if it’s calling me a prude in fly language, whatever that is. Flyanese, maybe. The first person flows really well. Generally I like to read/write 3rd but they way you recorded Ryan's curious little thoughs was very realistic. You certainly do have a way with words.

Its almost like Ryan's trying to fill his head with these wonderings so he doesn't have to focus on Brendon sucking him off. Because he lets him kiss him it seems like he cares for him, but he's just too innocent(?) to have sex with him yet. It's adorable and it works well with Brendon's character.

Overall, I really enjoyed it. I'll be checking out more of your stories in the future. :cute:

New story.
Oneshot.
1299 words.
Really weird.
I started writing it because I couldn't quite yawning at work.
I kind of like it despite (or perhaps because of) the weirdness.
Let me know what you think.

Happy reading!

xoxox
-Dru