July 10th, 2010 at 04:17pm
Flying - Comments
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Wow....That was so amazing. I love the words you use.May 8th, 2009 at 01:42am
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O.O
Damn, that was AMAZING! I have no chance with a drabble like THAT!
Best of Luck to you! but I don't think you need it. Your story is too amazing.April 18th, 2009 at 09:47pm -
I'm sorry this review isn't very long but the story isn't that long. Please don't hate me for the shortness.
I couldn't stay in that tower, slowly burning to death, choking on hot air and the saliva pooling in my dry mouth.
That line made my eyes go wide – the way you’ve described the fire has really caught my attention, I’m chocking on the hot air.
The pounding feet of a hundred people raced for the roof.
This makes me wonder where the narrator was and why aren’t they following the others – surely that would be the best thing to do, right?
I couldn't do it. I couldn't stay in that tower, to burn to death.
A less painful way out maybe?
At least I'm dying with the wind in my face.
That line and this whole piece was so affective for being so short. I really enjoyed the feel of this and I liked how the shortness didn’t make it lack in the edge of the whole story.
Amazing, it was pure amazing bliss. Like I said at the story of this review, I’m sorry for it’s shortness and I do hope you’ll forgive me. I did really enjoy this, thank you. :cute:April 17th, 2009 at 11:46pm
Beautiful.
Fantastic.
Amazing job.