Hummingbird - Comments

My eyes actually teared up at this. I don't know if it's because I'm getting my period soon or because I just read Third Time's The Glam, but I'm hella sure the main reason was because of the innocence in this, the way you phrased things and it's one big metaphor for something beyond understandable and just... the beauty of the hummingbird, as a thing. I mean, I was really at peace when I was reading this. The fact that it was so short was really effective tbh. It might have ruined it if it was any longer.

I'm not even going to try and pretend I know better and I'm not even going to try and pretend to give you con crit or say ''this was good but _____'' or ''I'm not too sure about that last line'' or whatever. This was a really, really beautiful piece.

The metaphor in this story is amazing. The winter part was very interesting to read.
Our hearts become cold from lack of love, you refuse to lead yourself that way. You insist to die in autumn were the weather is still warm and slowly getting brittle. It was very lovely. I hope that is what you were aiming for, because that's just what I saw in it.

Dannnnngg son.
This is bloody amazing.

I really like the image of the hummingbird living in your chest.
It's vivid, easy to picture. Lovely descriptions.
Very, very good. :]

Brilliant! Very metaphorical, makes you think a bit about a hidden message. Exceptional use of imagery!

Chapeau! :]