April 27th, 2009 at 11:41pm
AWESOME.
That was so cool! You have such a wonderful and strong imagination bro, only you could have thought of this!
........church huh? Well i guess you need to make a confession...........forgive me father for i have sinned................
I applaud you.
I thought that it was amazing. It was well thought out, and it made you think. I loved the part where the teacher was calling out the names, because it reminded me of my school :tehe:.
But nevertheless, I thought it gave enough information, and yet enough to keep you wondering. After the story was over I kept wondered, "Why did he kill his mother?"
I thought it ended kinda abruptly, but at the same time it made the reader wonder, and I really like that. Some people probably would have waned you to elaborate, but I think it was perfect where it ended.
Very good, keep up the good work!