Arranged, marriage to a hot self centered werewolf who has no sense of style whom I fell for - Comments

Okay i will try

Update soon please? :)

I think that you have a really good story going, but with both the punctuation and the grammatical errors it makes it difficult to read. Most times when the story is hard to read people don't want to read it. I am very excited about this story and will continue to read it, but I suggest that you get an editor that will revise your story and help make it readable.

Update Soon.

thanx for the help and i know were suppose to make a new paragrah. i'll try

well thats the point he is mythical and for that reason he should be over dramatic. Being a prince and also being a werewolf u would probably want to be over dramatic. mythycal creatures are something people think are unreal so to be real it has to match up to ur expectations or better yet over you expectations

Small Tip: Use Quotations.

Example: "Are we there yet?" She asked impatiently.

(Also, when a new person is talking, new paragraph)

There are a few grammatical errors, something Microsoft Word and revising before posting can help.

You switch from First person to Third person sometimes, and sometimes it's kind of hard to follow. Revising should help this, try reading it aloud to see how it flows.

The concept it kind of good, I think you may be over doing his looks a little bit. I mean, he's mythical but not even Edward Cullen is that beautiful. (:

Other then that, I suggest you try and spruce up your title. Maybe something shorter, stupid non-imaginative example: So Last Year, Then Again You Are Too

I know it's random, I just thought I would help, you know some constructive criticism. I promise I'm not trying to bring you down, just helping.

(If you need any more help, maybe a Beta reader sort of thing, you can always message me!)