The Rusty Bike Pump - Comments

I just read this again! It is a truly brilliant piece of writing!

Anyhow, Congrats on placing first!

uhhhhhh I just love this story!! And I wanna see Andy and Eric having Sex in that position! xDDDD
(of course in several different as well...xDD)
I think...or ebtter I want, that Eric and Andy make a porn like the one Eric has seen!! xDDD

You should write even more of this, 'cause Eric has to try out something new! xDDDD

All the mistakes are gone!

Oh and Deez Nutz is judging too! She'll probably leave a comment on this too!

Great job!

hahah this will be great xDDDDDDDDDD
Testing phases are always good *laughs* xDDDDDD

And I love eric for wanting to discover all the positions xD really cute ^^ <3
I can imagine that one hurting xDDDDDDDD my god, this is too much aerobic for me xD

Great plot. I enjoyed how you allowed E to discover the position and how you portrayed their characters.

Very good descriptions.

About half-way down, you had quite a few grammar mistakes and so forth. If you want to edit them, then just repost the link in the thread and I'll read it. Would have to edited before the end of the month though.

Good luck! Thanks for entering! :D