My Nearly immortal life - Comments

this was a good story i have one i am working on and it toys with the shape shifting too but ive hit a bump in the road but read it and comment if you would.. good job!

I just started reading it and it's truly really cool.

Great story. I just finished chapter three and i love the amount of details you put into it. A little advice though, you should space your paragraphs out. I use the same layout that you do and it is a lot easier to read when you space them out a bit. Other than that great job. I can't wait to see what happens with Sara

Ok, thank you for the advice, I'm kicking around some ideas for a semi-sequal, I'll keep your opinion in mind

This sort of reminded me of the movie Bicentennial Man. I thought it was awesome.
Although, it moved a little too fast for my liking, maybe next time slow it down a bit?

Hey this is my first love story, i am a true rooky, so keep the critisism productive please :file: