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  • the fallen.

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    I cried.
    Tears of joy and sadness.

    Brilliant work.
    June 24th, 2009 at 10:59pm
  • NerdIAm

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    duuude... thats deep....
    May 21st, 2009 at 07:59am
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    I love it. (:
    May 19th, 2009 at 07:39pm
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    Okay, so the first thing I noticed was that you didn't tag your dialogue correctly, so you may want to go over that.

    I thought this was interesting. I mostly liked the argument at the end. It was kind of confusing, a lot of accusations, but that's what made it feel for me. The confusion and all the back and forth. Pete saying he loves her and Anne saying he doesn't. Then Anne saying she loves Pete and Pete telling her that she doesn't. I really though that part worked really well because I'd imagine that's how it would be. Both sides being very confused and stuck in a difficult situation.
    May 17th, 2009 at 09:25am
  • jadecharizard

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    (post decision comment)
    ...
    . . .
    Oh. Em. Gee.
    I don't think I've wanted to read het so much since...
    about 2 years ago.
    Before I even knew what slash was.
    I know I'm being a bit obvious,
    but that was wonderful.
    I'm going to be a total fangirl, so yeah.
    SEQUEL. NOW. PLEASE. - AnnieHaha

    P.S. I know that didn't make a lot of sense so basically, I loved it. I want a sequel
    May 17th, 2009 at 07:23am
  • Jonne Aaron.

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    First off, wow. :tehe:

    I love the dynamics of the relationship in this, the unrequited love of sorts. A lot of the time it's over- or underplayed, to the point where it just goes stupid, but I think you've pretty much got it right. The emotions expressed from Anne's point of view seem so real, it's beautiful.

    You have an amazing talent for writing emotional scenes. I love how it's clear with what's going on in the character's head, but it's not always flat-out said.

    I really like how she admits she loves him, and then moments later she's pissed at him because of the situation and whatnot. It's something rarely seen, and it just works so well... especially with the way you've written it.

    It's also really good that you've more... insinuated that they slept together, instead of writing a sex scene and having this as the aftermath of sorts. I think it works better like this.

    There may have been an awkward sentence or two, but nothing too major.

    In all, a really well-written fic. Well done. :cute:
    May 17th, 2009 at 02:50am
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