nice 2 see a little brotherly lovin there! its nice 2 see a light hearted Kradam
April 17th, 2010 at 11:11pm
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I'm not sure which word to use to describe this, but it's something between fierce and awesomely adorable.June 21st, 2009 at 01:39pm
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The aforementioned singer blushed faintly, and thanked the makeup gods profusely afterwards because there was nothing more humiliating than acting like a poof in front of your flesh and blood.
You are the queen of amazing descriptions. :cheese:
I loved this, it made me smile. :cute:June 13th, 2009 at 04:17am -
Adam nearly threw his toothbrush at the slammed door, remembering just in time that he hadn’t brushed yet, and opted to chuck Neil’s instead.
BAHAHA. :XD
I love blushing Adam. It's something that you never see, yet you're quite sure happens.
I've missed reading your stuff. :arms:June 5th, 2009 at 03:28pm -
This was so amazing okaaay. :cute:
Amazingly cute, too. I love their relationship. True brothers, I lovelovelove it.
Really realistic, too. If I didn't know any better, I bet this was really happening irl.
Right under our noses.
:arms: Good job, Isa.May 29th, 2009 at 03:41pm -
OMG, I love every part of it.
May 28th, 2009 at 08:10am -
This was awesome and it made me laugh.
Neil doesn’t respond to the insult, and only shakes his head in that condescending way that always made Adam want to screech his ear off.
I love that. :tehe: May 26th, 2009 at 05:54pm -
Everyone said everything I wanted to say! :XD I'm absolute shit at giving reviews, so I'll just say that I really, really loved it. It was funny and realistic; I could actually see the whole scene playing my head like a movie. And lemme tell you, it's a damn good movie! :tehe: I liked how Neil kept poking fun at Adam. Definitely show's the brotherly love, and it's not all fluffy, like, "oh, don't worry, Adam, it'll all be fine. *hugs*" Do you get what I mean? (I'm shit at explaining the way I see things.) It's something I could expect from both Neil and Adam (even though I don't really know them personally, but you get what I mean). The whole thing was just so cute! It makes my computer want to explode with the adorableness of it. :XD
You have a really good way of not using a whole bunch of flashy metaphors to get the point across. It's simple, and I love that. And the, permission to molest the hottest Arkansas native ever bit just made me grin like a pervert.
EXCELLENT, Isa. :arms:May 26th, 2009 at 02:09am -
I'mma try to leave a comment better than "this was amazing". :con:
First off, I absolutely love how this started off. I love how it was dialogue at the start, because it captured my attention straight away and pulled me in and had me reading every word.
omg gokey just started playing on my itunes.
Queen of flirts. :tehe: Love it. Fits him well. :tehe:
“I mean, you must have more experience of dating guys like him than he has of you, anyway.”
The liner clattered to the sink, leaving an accidental smudge on Adam’s cheek. Memories of short, brown-haired, faceless ex-boyfriends flashed in his mind; memories he just wanted to forget.
“Don’t—don’t—”
"It was a joke, bro."
"They're not—"
“I know, I’m sorry, it wasn’t a good joke, obviously. I know you, I know you’re not heartless like that. You told me Kris was different, and I believe you.”
“You can hardly deny that you have a type, though, bro.”
I love that entire scene. I love the dialogue. It felt so natural.
(there were two actors in the family, one of them was just too lazy to pursue it)
Love that, too.
“You and Mom are just gonna sit here talking about us the whole time, aren’t you?”
“Not the whole time,” Neil admits innocently. “Anyway, it’s a lot less fun without you to go red.”
“I do not go—“
“—which isn’t really your color, bro, it clashes with your eyes—“
"You ass, get out of here! You’re quiet, but no one ever sees the evil side of—“ I absolutely love that. I love where you cut the sentences off and... It made me feel like that actually happened IRL. Feels so real.
permission to molest the hottest Arkansas native ever
AND I AGREE WITH HIM 9489449841091%.
:yah
The only thing that I didn't like too much was how Neil kept saying "bro", but mainly because I don't like that word. But I was stalking his blog a while ago and he seems like the type of person who'd say "bro" so. :XD
Now the "and being alive was an amazing thing" bit I wasn't so sure of, because, for me, it didn't fit in with the tone of the story very well. Like, the rest of the story was light and bouncy and smooth and now we have, all of a sudden, something that will get you thinking; something that isn't exactly light and bouncy. But then I reread the entire thing again and I realized that that was what Adam must've been thinking and then I suddenly got the mental of a smile creeping onto his lips when suddenly all his happiness bubbled to the surface, even without you saying it. Maybe it was my overactive imagination or maybe it was your intention, but either way, I like how it ended, too. (:
Overall, not your best, but I loved it just as much.
You did a great job, Isa. :arms:
sorry for such a shitty "review" though.
May 25th, 2009 at 04:27pm -
The portrayal for the brothers was adorable.
:cute:
I can see it happening in real life. :XD
And I really liked the "brotherly love" touch in it.
I'm a big sucker for brotherly/sisterly fics. :tehe:May 25th, 2009 at 04:27pm -
Awwwww that was so cute :cute:
That reminds that I have to mention Neil in my Kradam, now that I know his name :tehe:
Anywho, this was very well written and I love how you portrayed Adam and Neil . . and I loved the way you made them both talk about Kris May 25th, 2009 at 04:19pm -
Yay for brotherly love :tehe: I loved everything about this, srsly- your descriptions are great (especially that part about Adam's lips being a glossy streak on his scowling face- or whatever it was)
My favourite parts:
“And you’re the king—I mean, queen—of flirts, aren’t you?”
(there were two actors in the family, one of them was just too lazy to pursue it)
I just spotted one little mistake where you went into the present tense, when you'd been writing in past up until then:
Neil doesn’t respond to the insult, and only shakes his head in that condescending way that always made Adam want to screech his ear off.
But otherwise, fab! :cute: And I love that you dedicated it to the Glamberts, haha.May 25th, 2009 at 04:11pm
