My Best Friend's Brother - Comments

Woo-hoo! I really liked this. I never would have imagined Hermione and Fred together, but you actually made me believe it could happen. Hope you do well in the contest!

Wow, this was great :) I really enjoyed it, but I was a little surprised when Hermione started to full-on scream at Fred :P Just didn't seem very in-character. Oh well. Good job!

From the time I saw this pairing on the contest thread, I just knew it was going to be . . . well, rather difficult because Fred and Hermione are just so different. Fred is this troublemaker who lives life for fun whereas Hermione is this super smart girl who just has to do the right thing.

Anyway, I really, really liked this, although I still can't imagine them being together . . . Throughout the story, however, I was totally convinced that it was possible for them to be dating and whatnot. Nonetheless, you did a great job on this, and just 'cause I don't want Fred and Hermione to be together -- well, it has nothing to do with this. :con:

You described and portrayed their characters so well that I could absolutely imagine everything happening -- even the last part where, I admit, I was blushing a bit. Haha.

I ran out the big double doors to be met with the sight of Malfoy and his followers standing in what I hoped was slime. Awe, poor Malfoy! [*cough* Malfoy lover *cough*] :shifty This was like the time when Malfoy called Hermione a mudblood and Ron tried to put a spell on him, but ended up putting it on himself. Anywayyyyy, getting off track.

Fred and George were off to the side, laughing at the sight and giving each other high fives. Typical [Weasley] twins behavior. :XD

To tell you the truth, I was completely shocked when they started full-on making out in the library -- it just seemed kind of weird because, well, that doesn't seem to happen in Hogwarts a lot, now does it? Either way, it was awesome and I kind of giggled at Fred being all naughty in the end. Woo! :tehe:

You did an amazing job!

P.S. Good luck with the contest!

Very well written! It's just so refreshing to read a story with no spelling mistakes and no dodgy sentences, Well done!

In my opinion, this is a hard couple to write about, simply because Fred and Hermione are so different, personality wise. But you definately did it justice :)

Wow, this was really good. I love how you incorporated Hermione's brains into this in a really clever way. Fred is by far my favourite character, so you get extra brownie points for keeping him completely delectable

Nice layout too. The colors didn't make the story too hard to read, and I loved the Gryffindor symbol as the background.

Also, congrats on being the first to submit their entry

You'll know if you're a winner around June 25th maybe? The due date was the 20th, but if I have everyone's entries before then, it may be sooner.

Good luck!